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Two As One (Tanka) |
Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
5-7-5-7-7 5-7-5-7-7 One fights the other: Light is stolen by the night, night gives way to day. Moon is eaten by the sun, and a brand new day has come. At first appearance: Sum of one and one, is two, but none as so rare, sometimes the whole of the one, is the sum of each other. _______ ~Gene~ |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Gene, This is awesome, I love it, makes me want to try one, just what I need to do... I think I'm going crazy...LOL |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
There seems to be no limit to your talent, Gene! This is great!! Gloria, go for it! You can do it! Denise |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
This IS awesome Gene. "Sometimes the whole of one, is the sum of each other." ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is.... Black Eagle Oglala Sioux holy man |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Gene, WOW, this is great! At first appearance: Sum of one and one, is two, but none as so rare, sometimes the whole of the one, is the sum of each other. Did I say WOW? Dennis :^) |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Gene this is awesome ! I've seen the birth of this and it's incredible what you did with it ! I'm in total awe ! |
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Sasikat Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 290St. Petersburg, FL |
Gene, Exalting piece. Absolutely great. Sheila ...the earth and myself are of one mind. The measure of the land and the measure of our bodies are the same........... Joseph, Nez Perce Chief |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Awesome!! This is the second ever tanka I ever read...the first was Lost Dreamer's which gently directed me to yours in one of the replies. I think I might try to write one...got any tips? Love and hugs, Lizzie |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Everyone, Thank you for your gracious comments. I'm very pleased that you like this and deeply moved by your appreciation. ESP, A tanka is like a haiku but with an additional two lines of 7-7 syllable count. Tanka is more elaborate, expressing emotion and imagery and was considered more for the upper classes of Japanese where haiku was written mostly by the working class. Tanka can be combined to create poems of hundreds of lines and as typical should convey a zen-like message. In my tanka the message I tried to convey was one of an ancient zen saying, "One plus one is two, but sometimes, just one." Only recently, have modern western physicists discovered this to be true. quote: Do a search for tanka in th Poetry Workshop. Nan provided a lot of information there. Also, follow this link to learn more about haiku and tanka: http://poetry.about.com/arts/poetry/gi/dynamic/offsite.htm?site=http://www.toyoma su.com/haiku Have fun with it. ----- ~Gene [This message has been edited by u_gene (edited 04-07-2000).] |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
words can't adequately express how much i love this one...i think u have outdone even youself this time ") in fact,like those b4 me,i am going to try one out too.... keep those zen sayings coming!!! ") |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
All I can say U_Gene is OUTSTANDING. The rest leave me speachless. Thank you for including your additional information concerning Tanka. I prefer both Tanka and Haiku as poetic styles because they force one to chose words carefully. INclan |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Too good to disappear already. BUMP ! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
high time for a comeback and u_gene, i missed your zen tankas so... |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
Gene.... Though I have never attempted to write a tanka, reading this amazing piece made me want to pick up my pen and start...although it would never come close to the wonderful work here. Great Job! Best |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow I liked this one a lot. Wonderful job here! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow! Very clever of you! I know how difficult it can be to write just one tanka, but two together?! Wow again! Well expressed Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Kaile, Best, Dopey_Dope, Melissa, This one's pretty old, but I still appreciate all your kind words. Thanks, Gene |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
old huh?..like fine wine, it gets better with age...great read..I bow to a master.. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
sometimes the whole of the one, is the sum of each other. ____________________________ I have read these lines over and over, Gene. I'm not well-versed in Zen, but I do like this thought! Nicely done tanka! To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
since i want to read the replies but the computer wont let me do so , i will bump this up again.... as i read this again, i have an idea about joy and grief being interchangeable....rather fuzzy idea but will work on it? |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
This is so incredibly exquisite....and I almost missed it! Wonderful tanka and the history lesson very enlightening.. Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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