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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
Ok, I remember now I did post this in another forum, but it didn't really get much of a response. If you liked "He Thinks" this might be a good pre-quel to that one. -wen In the soft half-light of the early morn, he was aware of a stirring beside him. His eyelids cracked open as a shadow fell across them, and he glimpsed the curve of her side as she passed... her bare side... His eyes opened wider, though still heavy with sleep. She allowed the door to the bathroom to drift open, giving him full view of the old, cracked-porcelain tub with its lion-claw brass feet. She rested her body on the small stool next to it, her back to him, her half-moon profile suspended over her peach-skin shoulder. The pale light that filtered through the colored curtains made stained-glass shapes that danced across her face. She unbound her milk chocolate hair, rippling down to swish at her hip. She was leaning toward the window in just such a way that her body was in perfect line with the beam of light, forming a slide for the dust motes that trickled down. The soft rushing noise of the water lulled him into a daydream, his vision turning shimmery and crystalline. She rose from the stool, strobing in halos, her hair falling away to allow the light, now turning golden with the climbing sun, to illuminate her brassy thigh. She turned to look over her shoulder at him, her face enveloped in that elfin mask of hers which nearly drove him mad... for she always seemed to veil something behind her snowy skin and emerald eyes. Her willowy form arced around as if to come to him, and he felt giddy, almost drunk on anticipation. Then, she closed the door, the latch falling with a soft, final, click. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I remember this! A good one too! And as I said before - she has to come out of that bathroom sooner or later, huh?! hehehe |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
So, I did post it here before? I should write all this down, or I'll forget. I'm horrible about that... I'm always forgetting what I tell people so I end up telling one person twice and another not at all... *sigh* In any case, I probably shouldn't post in so many forums so I can keep better track of things.  -wen |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Whoa! Talk about imagery! Hey there are teenagers reading this stuff, you know, and you wouldn't want them to get any...ideas, would you? I'm just kidding! Great imagery, though...really, I'm serious.And I don't see why it didn't get too many responses--it's a great piece of work! Now, if only some more people would reply to "Faith in Dreams"...I'm really proud of that, it's one of my first poems lol "Weird?! No, 'weird' is when you apply your human rules to where they shouldn't be applied. That's why it seems strange to you." --Ttark |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Wendy, This is a wonderful piece and the imagery is excellent! Really enjoyed the read..... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wendy, So when is your novel going to be finished You sure did shut the door in our face This is a wonderful piece Liz |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Wendy, yes I remember this one too. From open#5 I think, but I'm not sure if I replied. Well, I'm replying now, ain't I ? I like, I like ! |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
This is beautiful... I like the ending... MAY THE ROAD RISE TO MEET YOU, MAY THE WIND BE ALWAYS AT YOUR BACK MAY THE SUN SHINE UPON YOUR FACE THE RAINS FALL SOFT UPON YOUR FIELDS AND, UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN, MAY GOD HOLD YOU IN THE PALM OF HIS HAND Irish Blessing |
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