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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN 
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As I look out the picture window it's you that I see with all the anger and hurt that you keep from me. The rain is pouring down at a steady pace beating against your handsome face. As you look up to the sky asking yourself "is there anything there?" I stare out wondering what your thinking and wishing that you would share. The street beams down on you as you reach up to the sky. Then I hear you ask "can you tell me why?" you fall down to your knees and whipe your eye. Was that a raindrop or do you actually cry? I open the door and walk out to you. As I carry a blanket thick and blue. I wrap the blanket around your body and ask you in a quiet voice "will you please come inside baby?" You take the blanket off and give it back to me then look into my eyes and say "just let me be" So i slowly walk inside tears coming down as i stare at you wishing there was something anything, that I could do. [This message has been edited by just_another_fe (edited 04-11-2000).] |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Angie, This is beautiful and a little sad. Nicely written. How 'bout "Tears of Rain" ? ~Gene |
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John the cat Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 357England |
How terribly moving and sad. How about No Comfort Blanket? May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out. Irish proverb. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a beautiful, moving poem. You could call it "River of Tears". Nah, never mind...I am no good at titles. I love this poem though! Love and hugs, Lizzie  |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
This is a sad poem, and you expressed that very well, sometimes we all feel helpless in one way or another. My choices for titles here would be: "Can You Tell Me Why?" or "Your Handsome face" |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
Hmmmmm no good at doing the title thing but very good poem filled with emotions  Great job!!Mystical being which makes ink flow Surround me in your incandescent glow Fill my brain with thoughts and rhyme As I try to capture but a moment in time ~Shan~ |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
Thank you all this was written from a picture i had in my head it didnt come out exactly how i wanted it to though. The guy that i love loves the rain and he said something to me about standing in the rain lookin up at the sky.Thanx for all the suggestions on the titles i think i'll use u genes thanx |
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