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I'ts Not Right !!! |
Chico Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 67 |
I'ts not right !! It's not right ! I'ts not fair. That I have to fight. to breath for air... Why is it light, When you are there? Then it turns dark as night. to dark to bear. How can you say goodnight, without a trace of care? Leaving me alone in fright.. That your dreams I'll never share. Why do you get a green light. And get to go everywhere? When I get a red light, And can't go anywhere? You get to go left and right, Or anywhere you dare... But I have to follow my headlight. And stay on the throughfare. I'ts just not right. I want to Tell you I care. But I'm afraid I might. Just get a glare... So I'll just stay out of sight, and sit here and stare. Hoping some day god might. Answer my prayer... [This message has been edited by Chico (edited 03-21-2000).] |
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William P Bussey Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 188 |
Chico, you have a nice way with words, you tell of sadness however, could it be that you need to forge ahead, not wait, then this may not be about you?????Very interesting words, keep it up...bill |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
No, it's not right. You shouldn't sit around and wait on anybody. Forge ahead on your own path. Well expressed thoughts and feelings in this! Denise |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Chico This was an excellent read! I really like the way you express yourself here. This poem had a hint of fustration, and quite a bit of sadness. Great poem! Take care, AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Well written. We cannot rely on others for our happiness. Look inside, find all the green lights you will need to persevere. ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is.... Black Eagle Oglala Sioux holy man |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
i enjoyed the the rhyme and rhythm of this poem almost as much as i enjoyed the message. you have a skill my friend, have you ever thought of writing songs? |
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Die In Vain Junior Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 15B.C., Canada |
I do like it. And as the others said, there is sadness and frustrations in it. You put it across well. |
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