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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
“Hail” black clouds glide the sky dark armies of invasion ravagers of light resistance is brief pelting precipitation bright day is subdued "I hate quotes, they suck!" I.G. Norance [This message has been edited by coyote (edited 04-11-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great haiku! I really could envision the happenings within the poem. I enjoyed this greatly!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Hey thanks, Javier. This scene was happening again today.  "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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Wesley the Blue Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 426Forest Lake, MN, USA |
there seems to be a hailstorm of Haiku's around here. Well done. I like the image of the storms "attacking." Keith every day is a new day with which we can change the world |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Been like that all day today... perhaps it has something do to with the necromantic gurus down on the softball field... that or I just washed my car  |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I like this very much. It says a lot. Joyce |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Beautifully written Haiku...so real, now how to get these hail stones off my keyboard? Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks Keith, Andrew, Joyce & Ellie. Glad you liked this one too. "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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Red_Feather Member
since 2001-01-19
Posts 131The Vagabond Sea |
Nature given due respect, i love the feel of power here. One's not half two it's two are halves of one EE Cummings |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Such storms can rage in the human mind, also. Thanks, Red_Feather. "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
good good not seen hail like that for a long time, . |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, Moon Dust. For takin' the time to read. "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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E.Fudd Junior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 38Dolgeville, N.Y.U.S. |
Coyote , Any feller that can quote from the famous I.G. Norance is a friend of mine . Well done here , medium there , rarely would one expect to find things cooked to such perfection outside of the "stute" E. Fudd [This message has been edited by E.Fudd (edited 04-13-2001).] |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Coyote, Ah don't listen to him , he's just a pain in my butt! However , I thought this was a very well written piece . Oops ! Time for my meds ! See ya around the "stute" Doc |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
You never disappoint, coyote! Another gem - to add to your growing collection! Lary |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, to Andrew and the "Stute suits". I'll see ya soon enough, lol. Thanks to you too, Laryalee. So glad you liked it. "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Coyote, you even brought across the sound, and feeling of impending doom...that "helpless" feeling... A successful haiku couplet, indeed! |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thank you, Sunshine. I guess the format helps to set the mood. coyote "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Paints a picture I am all too familiar with this spring. Good job. Betty Lou Hebert |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks for reading, Betty. Glad I'm not alone. "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
I like the way that you describe the black clouds as "Armies of invasion" This is an amazing metaphor, keep up the good work and you'll make plenty of people happy and inspire thousands!! Truly Appreciative ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thank You so much for reading, Kim. And Welcome to The Pub!! "I hate quotes, they suck!" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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