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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
this is something i originally posted in Dark, since that is about the only place i post in. but, as you will see, this is not dark at all. so i thought maybe i'd try posting it elsewhere, but didn't want to get lost in 0pen. i like the smaller crowds.  Hope you like!I wake up beside you as dawn breaks over the horizon and watch you sleep Moments quickly slipping into hours Afraid to breathe too deeply or move Not wanting to lose this stolen moment of simple pleasure I can't help but stare and admire the peaceful expression of contented slumber that rests upon your tranquil face I watch you breathe your chest rising and falling in the same rythmn that lulled me the night before Realizing I hadn't slept that good in years I run my fingers ever so gently through your hair Thinking I could do this; wake up beside you and watch you every morining for the rest of my life You stir slightly but do not wake I move in closer to you You wrap yourself around me And kiss me once upon my neck I smile and fall back into sleep |
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Koon Junior Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 43Singapore |
Sweet poem....simple but heavenly....nice one indeed. You're a lucky person.  Koon- |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Lucky AND talented! Beautiful poem, danni, and welcome to the Pub! I hope you like it here, and I enjoy a smaller crowd too...kinda makes your poem worth a little more if you ask me! Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
thank you koon. simple and heavenly is exactly what i wanted it to be. for that is what those moments are to me. and i must say, yes, i am lucky. spyro-my thanks to you too. for the wonderful welcome and comments. you are too kind. my talents lean more towards the "dark" side. but i will definately drop in when i have these happier inspirations. i am sure i will like it here. it seems good company. many thanks again to you both! |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Beautiful sweet. Good expression of warm, fuzzy feelings. Love this. |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Nothing dark about this--it's beautiful. Please visit the Pub more often. ~Gene |
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smallgrin Junior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 11texas |
So honest and gentle. I would love to hear more of your poems. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, Danni! Very nice! |
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danni Senior Member
since 1999-11-20
Posts 688wisconsin |
many thanks to you all. i am so glad that everbody enjoyed it. i will surely be posting more as the inspiration comes. in the meantime i will enjoy reading all the wonderful works here in the pub. thanks again for the kind words. you all have made me feel welcome! |
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freckles Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 160Virginia USA |
danni---this is beautiful (wish I could remember the feeling better than I do, though). [This message has been edited by freckles (edited 03-07-2000).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Good, a little TOO sweet, LOL, but I liked the imagery and gauzy feel to it. Personally, one of my fave things to do is watch someone while they sleep. All barriers are down and the truth surfaces beyond all the facades of waking. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful |
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