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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA 
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poet’s pen rides the crested tide of thoughts Yesterday was a good writing day, think I managed to hang onto all the thoughts until I could get them down, this was one of them. I was walking the downtown streets of New Haven with an open mind, notebook and pen in hand.  -wordancer "Only write from your own passion, your own truth. That's the only thing you really know about, and anything else leads you away from the pulse." Mar |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Isn't it delightful when our muse flows into our pens those poetic gems so sweet? A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
All you seem to need is a pen at the ready. Good one. Joyce |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
ellie, now that was a delightful way of putting it. Joyce, you should the ones that got away because I didn't have a pen handy...  -wordancer [This message has been edited by wordancer (edited 04-01-2001).] |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
If they got away, maybe they weren't meant to be yours. I like this one though.To love another person is to see the face of God. |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
pegasus bows to the dancer of words. lovely piece. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Good point. I recently bought a mini-recorder to replace the outdated pencil. Melton |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
hum, you know I have a mini-recorder, got it for my car trip last year. Now just need to remember to look for it. Thanks wo |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
"Takin' it to the street." Pulse of the poet. Loved it, thanks. "The only thing new in the world, is the history we don't know." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done......I liked this a lot.  |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
What a way to put it. ^_^ Great, WD.. BTW, just curious, isn't a haiku 5, 7, 5? Loved this anyway.. -Lynne |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
coyote,dopey and Yu Lan, thanks for the read, glad that you enjoy my words. Yu Lan, (my mini-lesson on the 5,7,5 format) ----- A lot of Americans who write haiku follow the traditional Japanese format, three lines consisting of 5,7,5 syllables respectively. But in the Japanese language it is not syllables that are counted, but sound symbols, which in reality makes the American haiku a bit too long. And actually Japanese poets do not count syllables, they count onji which means sound symbols and refers to one of the phonetic characters used in writing Japanese phonetic script. Approximately 12 English syllables best duplicates the length of Japanese haiku in the traditional form of 17 onji. Bill Higginson goes into detail about this in his: The Haiku Handbook, Chapter 8, The Form of Haiku. BTW: His handbook is a superior reference source for haiku. The Haiku Handbook, How to Write, Share, and Teach Haiku, by William J. Higginson, with Penny Harter; First Kodansha International, 1989 (No, I don't get a kickback from him, LOL. He is considered one of the best haiku experts in the world, and I'm a great admirer of his.) Guess, I'm saying haiku does not have to follow the strict 5,7,5 syllable count that we have fallen into thinking that it is the only rule for haiku. I, personally, started with it a couple of years ago and still use it sometimes. There are many great haiku in this format. With this in mind, I don't feel syllable count (and I don't count syllables any more as a rule) is as important as getting the haiku to be effective and saying exactly what you want to say in it, capturing that "ah-ha" moment, in other words, in a short concise thought. And do bear in mind there are other criteria that makes a haiku, beside the syllable count. It just depends how deep into the form you want to go. Here is a link to a really nice self-study haiku site. In the Moonlight a Worm [This message has been edited by wordancer (edited 04-03-2001).] |
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Panne447 Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 196S.A. TX |
worddancer, This shows a nice image. And though I am of the older school of thought I do enjoy the mini-versions too. But isn't a Haiku supposed to be about Nature - paint a scene in Nature and hopefully elicit an emotion or an Aha! from the scene painted with the Haiku? This seems like it would be more of a Senyru or a mini-version of one. I like your 'riding the crest wave of thought' - such a nice image and a great way of putting it. Thanks for sharing. Panne |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
My lady you are everywhere. Amazing work as always. |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
Panne, (blush) yeah it's a senyu, my mind slipped when I was typing the title and even I didn't catch it until yesterday. LOL, good eye there! Brad, well now, I wouldn't go so far to say I'm everywhere...but have visited different stray corners of the internet.  Do I know you? from where?-wordancer |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
Brad, never mind I answered my own question...lol. The Pub does make a rather nice second home you know. WO |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Sun crest wave In spray of thought A colorful mind ----- Don't know if this works... but it's what you made me think of... That you made me stop and write is the highest compliment I can offer... Thanks. |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
andrew, that works for me, what a lovely compliment. Let me return it to you. thought waves shatter into a million words |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
I bow to you and yours... you are most welcome. |
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