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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Smudge on wrinkled paper, tiny fingers gripping wood; pencilled lines erased, repeated, won't go where they should. Small mouth scrunched, awaiting judgment, eyelids seeping wet. A child in search of dignity - but doesn't know it yet. Saunter of defiance, clothes askew in rumpled quirk; vagueness hides direction, shelters aptitude for work. Arrogance pretending there is nothing more to know. A youth in search of dignity - but cannot let it show. Chained to tight agenda, not a minute free to waste; posturing and bowing, learning artificial taste. Elevator crowded; make adjustment for the sway. A life in search of dignity - but losing it each day. Smudge on wrinkled paper, fingers falter in their grasp; identity relinquished in the struggle for each gasp. Remnant worn and sagging, crying silently for peace. A soul in search of dignity - mortality's release. |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
hmmmm very interesting,your words and rhythm were impeccable(can't spell heehee). i think i should read it a few more times and make sure i get the whole impact,but thought it was really good!! samantha¤ much madness is divinest sense~Emily Dickinson |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Wow!!! You have left me speechless with this one, Lary. (Well, almost  ) The portraits are so vividly painted, especially the one of the small child, that I could see each of the people you spoke of, and I do like the way you bring this around full circle, not unlike Shakespeare's ages of man.  Guess I found a few words after all. Nice work!To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
You have captured the essence of the mind of a child, ever learning about life. I wonder if you are a school teacher??? I must say, well done! Deb |
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Wobbly Head Bob Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299Virginia, USA |
Beautifully writ, Lary! I like the search, the expanse of time, the mundane/silliness that is the course of life in search of dignity! The scheme was great and flowed so nicely! Great one! |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Lovely piece The world doesn't stop for you, but you can stop for the world. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i will often reply by saying "hi, i especially liked your _____ verse or the last _____ lines" i can't reply in the usual manner for this one because there are just so many lines that i like... i enjoyed the way you combined your words...interesting...  |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
forgot to save this in my library..sheepish grin |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Samantha - I'm glad you liked it, and hope it's not too convoluted! Marilyn - golly, you have some nice things to say! I had wondered whether the repetition of the smudge on paper would work, but I guess it does.... Thanks ! Well, Deb, never been a school teacher, but have lots of kids and grandkids! Thank you! Bob, those are heartwarming comments...really makes my day! I'm sure glad it came across okay...Thanks a bundle! Moon Dust - thanks for stopping in! kaile - so nice to meet you! (At least I don't remember meeting you before, heh heh - can't be sure of my memory though) I don't get around much, just hang out at the Pub when I can grab a few moments. Sure do appreciate your comments! Thanks so much, everyone! Lary |
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