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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME 
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I cannot promise To love you forevermore. Only as long as There is a you and an I, Only so long will I love. When the head says no Yet the heart insists on yes, The impossible Finally yields to what is, Souls united against odds. |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
oh, this is sooo Romantic, yes to following our hearts.. A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
Thank ya for your tankas! They are very good-very appropriatee- Very enjoyable--You did Good Grandma-- Happy Valentines! David No Better Place do I know Than where Hearts knit as one, For in that grand experience, The Better ALL become. God Bless us All!!! |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
happy Valentine's day Kcs...lovely tanka..  the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
woohoo!  against odds indeed....i like this one mar  , g"maybe one day we can turn and face our fears maybe one day we can reach out through our tears..." -a grant |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Ellie - Thank you once again, sweet lady. We wouldn't be passionate poets if we let our heads win all the time, now would we?David - Very kind, very sweet, and leaves me with a very big smile.  Hope you had a good day, too! Pegasus - Thanks. Hope your day was wonderful. Gale - The odds are only a number. Glad you stopped by. Love your "woohoo" !To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Lovely, Marilyn - graceful subtlety, surge of faith... "Souls united against odds" - love it! keep on rollin'.... Lary |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Lovely Tanka, Marilyn. You do these very well. Gene (formerly, u_gene) |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very nicely done Marilyn.......What a wonderful tanka.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Lary - You have such a nice way with words, even in your responses! Thank you.Gene - Thank you. I haven't done much with tanka yet, but it is an appealing form. Javier - Thanks. It's always nice to hear from you. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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William P Bussey Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 188 |
This is great, reminds me of a line I once wrote, it would fit in your poem. Would be nice if we had forever, a life is such a short time. |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Yes, your sentiment fits very well with mine. Thanks for sharing it.To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Oh Marilyn, this is just wonderful! I especially loved the second tanka Very inspiring and so true in most cases. This is a keeper Take care, Melissa~ |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hi...i liked the way you developed your first tanka...you have me thinking that the speaker is somewhat heartless not to promise to love his/her lover forevermore and pleasantly surprised when i read the last two lines....  |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Melissa - Thank you. I'm a little surprised how many found the second one appealing, as I had my doubts about it. It's nice to hear what others see in my writing. It changes my perspective.Kaile - Thank you for your thoughtful comments. I hadn't really thought of those first two lines as being heartless, but certainly did intend the twist. It's nice to have you here, again. If you ever really find me heartless, let me know. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
^_^ Well, I enjoyed this. ^^ Sorry, but I can't really find much to critique.. Love, Lynne |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
Goodness! So many beautiful words! I can only hope my Valentine is like this! Hehehe Wonderful work! ~~Jamie I mean the opposite of what I say. You've got it now? No, it's the other way. ~Bruce Bennett |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Lynne - Thanks. You're sweet. I'll let you off this time.Jamie - Hope you had the very best of Valentines. Thanks. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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