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wordancer
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0 posted 2001-02-06 03:34 AM



a streetlight glows
behind white flocked branches
silent night



"Come...dance with me, into my world of words."


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pegasus111
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1 posted 2001-02-06 06:51 AM


more snow in the dancer's neighborhood, eh?   nice one lady.(at 3:30am)

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost



wordancer
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2 posted 2001-02-06 07:03 AM


oh yeah, lots of snow; every thing and all the trees and bushes look like someone went really crazy with zillions of cans of the fake snow that people use to spray on their xmas trees...do they still do that?  

Now that I thought about it some, perhaps I should reverse the first and third line. Doesn't change it, but brings the hushness of the aftermath of the storm to the front.  Hum...what do you think, peg?

silent night
behind white flocked branches
a streetlight glows

-wordancer

[This message has been edited by wordancer (edited 02-06-2001).]

pegasus111
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3 posted 2001-02-06 09:20 AM


brushing snow from his wings, he nods in appreciation for an agile mind in one so fair. then offers a counterpoint.

the soundless night
a heavenly shower descends
in murky light

so says the winged pegasus..




the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost



wordancer
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4 posted 2001-02-06 12:17 PM


...still wondering how a southern winged wonder got snow on his wings...  

WO

pegasus111
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5 posted 2001-02-06 10:47 PM


those that fly high get ice on their wings..lol

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost



bestgirl911
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6 posted 2001-02-07 01:12 PM


Worddancer...

This brings a peaceful image to my mind....and I think I like the revised version even better....and BTW....you two just crack me up.

Best

wordancer
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7 posted 2001-02-07 01:45 PM


yeah, you should see us went we really collide...the heavens gasp in awe.....at the flames of our words.

Yes, the second verison is a lot better, but not done tinkering with it yet...thanks for the reminder that I wanted to.

-laughing lady dancer of the words



[This message has been edited by wordancer (edited 02-07-2001).]

kcsgrandma
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8 posted 2001-02-07 11:22 PM


  Lots of snow here, too.  It would be a lot prettier if we could just stay inside.  

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

JOY 14
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9 posted 2001-02-08 07:41 PM


This gives me a peaceful feeling inside. I start to remember good times. I've always been intrigued with street lights. Thanks Wordancer, for bringing back memories.

Joy

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