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pegasus111
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ocala, fl, usa

0 posted 2001-02-02 02:29 AM


Tired of winter? Need a break? Try this.
____________________________________________________

carousel spins
a blaring pipe organ tune
carnival night-


a thousand mirrors glint
cotton candy softly pink
melts at the touch

sawdust in the shoes
balls fly everywhere-
win the cupie doll


walk hand in hand
warm breezes cool the skin-
moist from summer heat



the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost




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ellie LeJeune
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1 posted 2001-02-02 06:04 AM


Ah, Pegasus; This did the trick of warming my heart this winters morn.. Lovely! Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

2dalimit
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2 posted 2001-02-02 06:50 AM


The image is super and festive... except for the cotton candy (too sweet now that I'm older).
Melton

wordancer
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VA
3 posted 2001-02-02 12:57 PM


ooohhh, cotten candy...the festive mood is wonderful, feels like i'm there!

WO


Note: You might want to look at all those
-ing endings you have there.

-your Haiku master  

pegasus111
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ocala, fl, usa
4 posted 2001-02-02 01:46 PM


I got dat "ing" on duh brain Lady..thanks for the reminder...   Better?




the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost




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5 posted 2001-02-02 07:50 PM


Hey, beauiful best part of summer that is

When freedom wisphers your name, it's time to fight for it.


kcsgrandma
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Presque Isle, ME
6 posted 2001-02-03 01:01 AM


Thanks for the nice reminder of warmer days.  

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

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7 posted 2001-02-03 01:47 PM


Nicely done here.
I liked it very much!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Denise
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8 posted 2001-02-03 02:19 PM


I'm ready!!
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