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kcsgrandma
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0 posted 2001-01-29 01:23 AM


Voices Tanka

Wilderness voice cries
Prepare ye the way of God.
Earth's voice echoes "Why?"
If You are Love, why are there
Broken bodies, hearts and lives?

Pain all around me
Earthquakes, sickness, and lost love.
What is the reason?
Do You not hear the weeping?
How can You let this happen?

Spirit voice whispers
Of course I hear you my child.
Be still and know God.
Take and eat in remembrance.
The way will be made plain.  Wait.

Tears of submission,
Reaching for my brother's hand.
Now seen in suffering
New purpose for my being,
Chances to share divine love.



© Copyright 2001 Marilyn Gordon - All Rights Reserved
Songbird
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1 posted 2001-01-29 01:28 AM


Its a winner! in my book.  Never wrote one myself, but enjoyed yours.
ellie LeJeune
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2 posted 2001-01-29 06:07 AM


Marilyn; These are exquisite! You've been doing your homework on the side. Most of all I love your message, deep and thoughtful and filled with wisdom and His glorious Love. I'm a recipient of His caring Love from you and grateful for it and you. Love, Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

mystic requiem
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3 posted 2001-01-29 09:13 AM


Grow confident that your work is good.
*thanx*

mYsTiC


JOY 14
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4 posted 2001-01-29 12:44 PM


kcs, I have never wrote a tanka either. But you've inspired me to try one. Thanks.  
God's ways are a mystery. I've had these exact same thoughts.

Joy

pegasus111
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5 posted 2001-01-29 04:19 PM


Kcs..lovely..gentle?..lol..kiss..hug..how's that?

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost


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6 posted 2001-01-29 05:02 PM


Wonderful job on this.......I liked it a lot!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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7 posted 2001-01-29 05:24 PM


You know I've never tried doing one of these   but you make it look so easy.

When freedom wisphers your name, it's time to fight for it.


kcsgrandma
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Presque Isle, ME
8 posted 2001-01-29 11:51 PM


Songbird - Thank you.  It was an interesting challenge.  You should try it.

Ellie - Passions has been my tutor.  I learned most of what I know here.  This came from honest personal struggle with these questions.  And it is friends like you who point me to answers.  I am most grateful for you, too.  hugs

mYsTiC - Bless you for that comment.   With that kind of support, perhaps I shall.

Joy - Thank YOU! I am anxious to see what you come up with.  

Pegasus -   That is absolutely perfect.  Thanks.

Javier - Thank you.  You're the best.  

Maria - Thanks.  Not easy, but worth the effort, I think.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

deleeme
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9 posted 2001-01-30 06:27 AM


Marilyn,
  I just found this delightful treasure here-and if this is your first one you may be a Natural!  The subject of it too, is wonderful!
You have done very well- a lovely piece!
Please pat yourself of the back for me,
(gently of course).
        David


No Better Place do I know
Than where Hearts knit as
one,
For in that grand
experience,
The Better ALL become.

God Bless us All!!!

kcsgrandma
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10 posted 2001-01-30 11:39 PM


David - Thank you for your sweet (and gentle) reply.    Yes, it is my first.  To tell you the truth, I didn't know it was going to take this form when I was thinking about writing.  It just insisted on being written this way. But it is an interesting form to work with, and I may try more.  

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

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11 posted 2001-01-30 11:45 PM


KCS~
Your thoughts are just so lovely in this.
Enjoyed it tremendously.
I will look forward to seeing more of these from you.
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~


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kcsgrandma
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12 posted 2001-01-31 12:01 PM


Marge - Thank you, and thank you for your e-mail.   It's nice to know someone's paying attention.  hugs

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

laryalee
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13 posted 2001-02-04 08:27 AM


Wonderful piece!  Imagine taking such a massive theme and presenting it in such a delicate and humble manner - Marilyn, you have the true poet's Touch!
Lary

kcsgrandma
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14 posted 2001-02-04 09:17 AM


Lary - Thank you for your kind words. I was feeling very troubled about things, particularly the earthquake in Gujurat, and the personal troubles of several people I care about, one of whom happens to be Gujurati but living in the US.  You know how sometimes poetry chooses a form for you?  This one did that.  I don't know why.  

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

bestgirl911
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15 posted 2001-02-07 02:15 PM


kc....

I have never written a tanka either, but the subject matter and your beautiful words make for a inspiring poem.....

Ranea


[This message has been edited by bestgirl911 (edited 02-07-2001).]

kcsgrandma
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Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME
16 posted 2001-02-08 12:25 PM


Thanks, Ranea.     Perhaps you will give it a try sometime.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

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