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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
I was reading about Acrostics in the Poetry Workshop and was compelled to give it a shot...Let me know what you think....did I survive? Where do I go from here? How do I go on? Everywhere I look, Reminders all around. Endlessly breaking my spirit. Don't believe I'm over it, Outside appearances lie. I try so hard to move on. Gray skies cloud my way, Over and over, day after day. First time I wanted to call, Realization washed over me, Oh, the pain it brought, My best friend, gone forever. Hear your voice in my heart, Everday I'm alive, Reminding me you're here, Even if it's only in my dreams. |
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Wesley the Blue Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 426Forest Lake, MN, USA |
I think you passed with flying collors. Wonderful job on such a soulful write. every day is a new day with which we can change the world |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Best, First one? Not only is this a great acrostic, it's one of the best I've seen.  It's very difficult to write one and have it make sense while having a nice flow too. This one accomplishes both those things beautifully. ~Gene |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I find it very hard to believe that this is your first acrostic! Very well done! Do I ever relate! Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
Wesley... Thank you so much.... Gene... Wow, what wonderful compliments...Thank you. Melissa.... Honest to goodness it is my fist....That in itself was a wonderful comment. Ranea |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
This looks like a success to me.  I just wrote an acrostic, though not one I can share here, and it was hard work! This was not easy subject matter, either. Good job.To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Beautiful job! I think you've been writing these for years... Love, Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Go to the head of the class. Good work. And keep your friends close. Melton |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
I agree, you deserve an A! This doesn't read like a "first" acrostic. It's well-written and heartfelt! |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
Ellie.... First one...really.....but, maybe I should write more...no one believes me...*L* Melton.... Thanks for the bump to the head of the class...and I always do keep my friends close..in my heart. Debbie... Thank you for the kind reply and it really was my first.....=O) Ranea |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was beautiful. I liked this one tons. very good acrostic!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I just finished mine for the Workshop and was surprised how dificult acrostic really is! You did great! Loved it!  |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
Dopey & Munda Thank you so much....I was just reading about them and decided to give it a try and WOW! what response I got.... Ranea |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
always nice to see someone stretch her poetic limits and i say you have done this well.... the line "outside appearances lie" just grabbed me...i have no explanation for that but thought i shall tell you how much i liked that line  |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
I usually don't care for acrostics but this one was an exception. It flows smoothly with good meaningful content. [This message has been edited by Songbird (edited 01-24-2001).] |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Wow, umm.. what do I say?!! WOW.. this is SO GOOD! you have made it sound so easy, and natural.. Your first.. wow.. what an amazing acrostic, for ANY attempt.. ^_^ Loved it.. pass? Understatement..  -Lynne |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent!! These are hard to do and you've done it beautifully!! Very well done!! Denise |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
Kaile... Your comment was so very kind. Thank you. Songbird... What a compliment.....I am honored. YuLan... WOW....Thank you so much....I just wasn't sure if this was a good attempt...but the reception it recieved has shown me. Denise... As always your comments are so nice...I appreciate that, thank you. Ranea |
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Mr. Nice112 Junior Member
since 2001-01-27
Posts 26 |
Well lets see what is there to say, what i am tryin to firgure out is if ur the one that got me interested in website .. tell me where u once bstgirl911... well anyways u brought me from lovepoems to here at netpoets... i was confused and u helped me.. Thank you very much!!! All i ask in life is a beautiful woman to love, and a little sip of faygo too... MCL |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
Mr. Nice.... Yes indeedy I am or was...bstgirl911.... and you're from NY right? I remember it well. Haven't seen you around in awhile...stick around...you'll meet lots of friends here. Best |
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