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wordancer
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since 2000-07-30
Posts 809
VA

0 posted 2001-01-04 08:37 PM


yeah, who says this woman can’t jump?
--
--
--
nope, this is not about jumping the hoop
just feel like being rather cryptic
somewhat mystic
as I tie my shoes. . .ready to run
in place, with no face
I’ll play the game
even though you stacked the deck
(snake eyes, I lose)
not seeing my desire
if I have to ask for the distant star
then I’m not good enough
makes perfect sense to me
(this is as close to the truth of the matter I gonna to get)
as I slowly dribble down the court
don’t be confused, you really don’t want to know
just a cheap laugh at my expense
nope, I’m not going to pay that bill
I got my pride you know
(that is all I have left)
lets go. . .on with the show

the shot, the shouts
rings in my ears
damn! my best slam-dunk
rolled up ball of written words
fell flat, stuck in the craw
in the maw of gaping minds that
are the square rectangles of triangles crammed into pi
completely over shot their third eyes
shoot!
missed the hoop
the crowd groans
jump again
(she soars, she scores)
nose smacking hoop
flat on back
flaming stars
shouts of awe
not for me
(the fireworks outside)
because they don’t see
the stubborn reality of wanting to be
all the while I play a game
of delusion
just a master baiter
stroking myself
hook shot under the jaw,
to flop on the wooden floor
last gasp for air
shadow in the empty space
a possibility that they don’t see
funny thing is no one knows the
futility. . .just me

ok, I’ll pick up my marbles and leave
(lost one this time)
darn, that third eye of mine
rolled under the bleachers
to be thrown out by the sweepers--
but, by the sun above
tomorrow is another scarlet day

I’ll be back again, to play
(knowing that I will only lose)
in lost hope
that you will see me worthy; as I
shoot!
for the golden hoop

. . .and the wordancer wanders off into the sunset of her mind, humming a ditty about a kitty. LOL, nothing else to do, except maybe, lay off the coffee. . .and sometimes it is rather fun to twit at oneself; puts it all in its proper perspective  you know?
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Denise
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1 posted 2001-01-04 09:03 PM


If we never give up, we may just surprise ourselves one of these days and actually win!! Very creative writing! I enjoyed this immensely!!

Denise

raleighbttrfly
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since 2000-11-21
Posts 160
Raleigh NC
2 posted 2001-01-04 09:25 PM


make a few good shots, miss a few to
thats all we can hope for, what ells can we do?

I can relay identify with what you say here.
clever styl liked this one a lot.

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I am not always lonely even if I am always alone

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pegasus111
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa
3 posted 2001-01-05 07:14 AM


this is a buzzer beater for sure..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost


shira
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since 2000-12-12
Posts 88
Hamburg, PA
4 posted 2001-01-06 10:02 AM


This is a really interesting analogy. But I can see where you are going with it, and I think its very creative, and very true. Nice poem, I liked it.
Wikket
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 340
Santa Clara, CA USA
5 posted 2001-01-06 11:56 AM


That's it wordancer...don't let 'em knock you down.  If they do, get back up...that's the only way to survive!     Nice work!  I liked all the marble stuff...haven't done that since I was about 5!  Thanks for the flashback!

~~Jamie       


I mean the opposite of what I say. You've got it now? No, it's the other way. ~Bruce Bennett

wordancer
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since 2000-07-30
Posts 809
VA
6 posted 2001-01-07 06:40 PM


Thanks folks, this has to be one of my most favorite (serious) fun ones, even though I was majorily twitting myself at the time.  You know I didn't get want I wanted, but in the quest of that particular item, is how I became truely the wordancer...hum...

Methinks, I won after all.

-the laughing (at myself) Lady Wordancer.

Broken_Winged_Angel
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
7 posted 2001-01-16 10:45 PM


If I may, UP! UP! UP!  *lol*  I love this poem.  

With a little piece of tomorrow,
You'll have to kiss yesterday goodbye.
Because today won't last forever,
And the past will only make you cry.

kaile
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singapore
8 posted 2001-01-17 05:50 AM


i say you have SLAM DUNKed with this one...
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