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Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

0 posted 2001-01-04 06:03 PM

I am the mantle clock
faced – and outward
I stare
at hands that would seek
to touch this countenance
this broken glass
marred, imperfect
from the fight of backwards time
tock tock tock
strain the force-me-forward
clogs, geared to submission
I watch
the days, they pass
unhindered
beneath lowered lashes
tipped in tears – as
yesterday comes in my room
to set his watch
I scream
in meaningless chimes
and bongs
whirling my arms circular
for attention…
something
something
Yet serving as the
simple reminder – to go on
move on
beyond that which I can provide
for all I am is a vessel
of time

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 2001-01-04 07:42 PM

Nicole, this is excellent writing, very well done, I enjoyed this! You should post more often!

Denise

Quiet One
Junior Member

since 2001-01-01

Posts 46
Shhhhh

2 posted 2001-01-05 12:49 PM

interesting perspective
very nicely written, I enjoyed

pegasus111
Member Elite

since 2000-07-27

Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa

3 posted 2001-01-05 07:05 AM

I agree..very well done..would like to see more..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

ellie LeJeune
Member Elite

since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

4 posted 2001-01-05 07:10 AM

Pefectly eloquent analogy...Beautiful! Ellie

Belief is a truth held in the mind; faith is a fire in the heart.

Joseph Fort Newton

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

5 posted 2001-01-05 01:59 PM

I completely agree with Denise, I would love to see more of your poems posted in the forums. excellent writing,

It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious
Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy

Wikket
Member

since 2000-01-29

Posts 340
Santa Clara, CA USA

6 posted 2001-01-05 04:37 PM

WOWEE! That was a very interesting piece of writing! Intrigued to the core I am! MORE MORE!

~~Jamie

I mean the opposite of what I say. You've got it now? No, it's the other way. ~Bruce Bennett

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

7 posted 2001-01-05 05:49 PM

oh I enjoyed this very much, excellent writing Nicole

yes I agree with Denise, you should post more often!

Maree

I need a lullaby
a kiss goodnight
Angel sweet love of my life
Oh, I need this

~Natalie Merchant~

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

8 posted 2001-01-07 11:53 AM

Indeed you don't post often Nicole, but when you do... WOWSA! Great writing girl. Loved it.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

9 posted 2001-01-07 07:39 PM

Satiate~
What a great metaphorical timepiece !
Wonderfully and cleverly done.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

10 posted 2001-01-08 02:16 AM

Yes, but yer such a cuuuuute vessel!

BOL

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