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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Snow Tears As the snowflakes fall, and the music fades unknown feelings sweep over me. The wet of tears, rests on my lips the taste of salt is on my tongue as I catch the two mixing, the skies happiness and my own sad thoughts of loneliness on this beautiful winter evening. Glistening cold under the street lights each flake falling, spiraling landing upon the ground, covering the old with new. Snow tears freeze dry upon my cheeks stained in red, the cold of hurt. For each step taken, one is left behind... ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
oh my, the last line is perfect, it ties it all up and together rather nicely. The coldness/starkness and snow and tears intermingling...layers of frozen pain...ahhh... "Come...dance with me, in my world of words." |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
This is simply fantastic...I think it represents life. Life is composed of many layers of ice, some of which are shattered and painful and others which are solid and good all around. --Lil' Girl |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
wordancer, yes layers of frozen pain..if only they could be numbed forever thank you for reading... Lil' Girl_ I, like your analysis..thank you huggz to you both and A Happy Holiday season ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
Nakdthoughts: This poem was a mixture of loveliness and sadness. I liked how you compared and contrasted everything. Some tears are like snow then others are hot and burning. I hope your sadness ends soon. Take care. ~Lisa~ ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
Oh goodness! I just want to reach out and give you a hug! I haven't had many 'snow tears' being from Southern Cal, but I have had many early morning tears watching the ocean waves. Very Deep and tons of truth hidden within the lines in this one! Superb! < !signature-->--Jamie "Who does not love the Titanic? ...We all go: only a few, first-class." --David R. Slavitt, 1983 [This message has been edited by Wikket (edited 12-23-2000).] |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Your analogy is exquisitely perfect amidst the pain....I wish for you that spring will return to your heart, as it always does. Ellie Belief is a truth held in the mind; faith is a fire in the heart. Joseph Fort Newton |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wynter~ Sending you great big HUGS, my friend. Exquisite writing of the pain. ~*~ *Wanna have a tear-ball fight ? *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
~Lisa~ all emotions will change in time..I am a very moody person affected by almost everything ..thank you for reading and your kind words huggzz --Jamie- yes you know that old saying "the truth hurts" well it is at it's highest pain at the moment..thank you for responding to my words Ellie-such sweet wishes, thank you ~*Marge*~where DO YOU get these pics from haaaaaaa your responses are so cute you know....we have got to meet ..my next visit to FLA........promise me that!!!! ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
Wynter: Your Welcome. Well your not the only one who is moody at the drop of a hat. Me I'm the opposite, but it takes all kinds to make the world go 'round as they say. Take care. ~Lisa~ ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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