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allan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-09

Posts 620
On the road

0 posted 2000-12-15 08:22 PM

there was a dream
close up tight by the heart
aching for kisses
it ate dirt with the masses
so long to the child inside
there was a dream
crawled crying to someone
for healing
but noone heard

this business world
spits on you...

[This message has been edited by allan (edited 12-15-2000).]

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

1 posted 2000-12-15 08:42 PM

Kinda agree with you here

Life has got to chnage,
Nothing stays the same,
Soon it will be time,
For me to move on.

allan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-09

Posts 620
On the road

2 posted 2000-12-15 09:02 PM

Thanks Maria - just drunk and crying inside...

raleighbttrfly
Member

since 2000-11-21

Posts 160
Raleigh NC

3 posted 2000-12-15 09:21 PM

I think you are right, we all feel like we have been spit on sooner or later.

:

I am not always lonely even if I am always alone

pegasus111
Member Elite

since 2000-07-27

Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa

4 posted 2000-12-15 10:03 PM

this is a very large boat my friend..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

allan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-09

Posts 620
On the road

5 posted 2000-12-15 10:25 PM

...there's a gigantic hole in the bow pegasus...

ty for the fellow feeling raleigh...

Broken_Winged_Angel
Senior Member

since 2000-04-06

Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere

6 posted 2000-12-15 10:38 PM

I'm here to help bail...

Good sentiments.

allan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-09

Posts 620
On the road

7 posted 2000-12-16 11:14 AM

B_W_A

kcsgrandma
Senior Member

since 2000-09-24

Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME

8 posted 2000-12-16 12:02 PM

Pass the bucket, lots of us to pitch in. And don't give up on the dreams.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

9 posted 2000-12-16 03:29 PM

heh just found a cork to plug the hole, hopefully it is big enough...
Really enjoyed the poem.

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

10 posted 2000-12-16 05:51 PM

Hi Allen, I really enjoyed your poem and your style, great writing!

Maree

"If my words could blanket the skies
and fill every corner and crevice of
this earth, still this wouldn't be enough"
"Maree Russo"

allan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-09

Posts 620
On the road

11 posted 2000-12-16 05:58 PM

Thanks people.

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

12 posted 2000-12-16 07:41 PM

oh,how not to lose sight of yourself when the vicious world is seeping in...

good sentiments...good poem...i enjoyed

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

13 posted 2000-12-17 01:08 AM

Wonderful words.......a great read!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

midnightblues
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 1597
Singapore

14 posted 2000-12-17 08:06 AM

true!!!! *midnightblues nods her lil head profusely* ure not alone allan, i oways get 'spat' on! *puiZz* so darn this realistic world.....but too bad...so here we are to get it off our chests *S*

love, michelle

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

Yu Lan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-13

Posts 1462
New Zealand

15 posted 2001-03-30 03:44 AM

I'm not sure what to say of this Allan, it is so brilliantly written, but man, you are crying so much here! This poem is unbelieveably full of.. everything.. I'm sorry..
Allan? What was your dream?
I think it still should be your dream.. 'nightmares' only temporarily interupt the dreams.. they don't stop them from being.. Find something to make you smile, k Allan?

-Lynne

Suzanne Arlene
Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 377
Ontario, Canada

16 posted 2001-03-30 06:42 AM

wow It is a cruel world out there. Sorry you had to feel it. Suzanne

2dalimit
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since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

17 posted 2001-03-30 07:04 AM

Realities of life sometimes is a b b b bad thing, isn't it? Your thoughts are deep and emotional.
Melton

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

18 posted 2001-03-30 10:02 AM

I liked the reference to "eating dirt with the masses".
Yet, the King's concubine said, "Let them eat cake", and the masses removed her head. lol
Very powerful thoughts here.
We've all felt them, my friend.
Thanks.

"The poet is the priest of the invisible."
Wallace Stevens

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