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blackhalo
Member

since 2000-02-15

Posts 467
Denver, CO

0 posted 2000-12-13 12:38 PM

I think
That I
May say
Goodbye
With solemn tears
In my eyes

But I'm afraid
That I fear
Losing someone
Too dear
And being gone
Over a year

To say goodbye
I cannot do
Too lamented
My loss of you
Always there
But I never knew

I could not bear
Losing you

pegasus111
Member Elite

since 2000-07-27

Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa

1 posted 2000-12-13 12:45 PM

also very effective..I like the sparse style.
keep them coming..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

Wobbly Head Bob
Member

since 2000-05-15

Posts 299
Virginia, USA

2 posted 2000-12-13 01:25 PM

Sad...so sad, I feel it spoken softly. Great piece.

Broken_Winged_Angel
Senior Member

since 2000-04-06

Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere

3 posted 2000-12-13 10:25 PM

This reminds me of graduation and saying goodbye to good friends...Leaving to come back a year later for the summer again.. Very well done..

dena*mystrawberries
Junior Member

since 2000-10-15

Posts 15

4 posted 2000-12-14 12:27 PM

i really felt this one...its a beautifully simple piece...

ellie LeJeune
Member Elite

since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

5 posted 2000-12-14 06:55 AM

Put simply, sad, but so lovely....

Belief is a truth held in the mind; faith is a fire in the heart.

Joseph Fort Newton

shira
Member

since 2000-12-12

Posts 88
Hamburg, PA

6 posted 2000-12-14 08:49 AM

This is a lovely, heartfelt poem. Saying goodbye, whether temporarily or permanently is always hard.. it seems so... final. Very nice poem.

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

7 posted 2000-12-14 11:22 AM

Although the poem is sad, I enjoyed the read.

blackhalo
Member

since 2000-02-15

Posts 467
Denver, CO

8 posted 2000-12-14 12:20 PM

Thank you all. This just seem like a good thing to write at the time. It is always so wonderful to get amazing compliments on things from the junk pile!
Alicia

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

9 posted 2000-12-15 09:18 PM

Hey this doesn't sound like it come of the junk pile. I thought it was lovely

Life has got to chnage,
Nothing stays the same,
Soon it will be time,
For me to move on.

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