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dena*mystrawberries
Junior Member
since 2000-10-15
Posts 15


0 posted 2000-12-11 01:21 AM


He slept next to me last night
shared my bed soundly
and I waited for a short breath
a whisper
I hoped for a touch
and I rested
alone

He slept next to me last night
shared my bed soundly
and I waited for a caress
a laugh
I hoped for murmurs
and I rested
alone

He slept next to me last night
shared my bed soundly
and I waited for love
confirmation
I hoped for an embrace
and I rested
alone

He slept next to me last night
shared my bed soundly
and he woke with whiskey soured breath
a headache
said goodbye
and I slept
alone



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pegasus111
Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa
1 posted 2000-12-11 07:46 AM


hmmm..you got the wrong person in your bed..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost


midnightblues
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597
Singapore
2 posted 2000-12-11 10:49 AM


now that wuz sad .... =(
but lovely..... keep posting!!


love, michelle


If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

Munda
Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
3 posted 2000-12-11 10:59 AM


Unfortunately hope and reality too often are two different things. You describe it well !
Wobbly Head Bob
Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299
Virginia, USA
4 posted 2000-12-11 02:23 PM


Dena...I know this feeling!  OH you've described it exactly, the hope, excitement, anticipation, met with nothing...a goodbye.  I felt this deep in my heart.  Thanks for the read!
dena*mystrawberries
Junior Member
since 2000-10-15
Posts 15

5 posted 2000-12-11 07:05 PM


thank you for your feednack guys....also, if anyone can give me some style and format tips, i would appreciate it more than you know...

pegasus...lol..right guy...I blame this one on the bed

michelle....it's not sad...okay, well, it's a little sad...i'm not sure..

munda...i prefer the dream world in this one...

bob...in that case, i wish it had been you

Broken_Winged_Angel
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
6 posted 2000-12-11 11:02 PM


I know this feeling.  I hope you find someone who can sense your needs in bed...   I'm not sure that sounds the way it should..  
Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

7 posted 2000-12-12 04:03 PM


When did you stay over at my house  
No, seriously, this is a sad piece, and I hope it's not a personal experience!


"Always be a first rate version of your self instead of a second rate version
of someone else." Marilyn Monroe



shira
Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 88
Hamburg, PA
8 posted 2000-12-13 12:34 PM


How sad, yet how true to life for some of us. I see I am far from alone in these feelings. Wonderfully done. I really liked this.

-Shira

blackhalo
Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
9 posted 2000-12-13 12:45 PM


     C      S
    R Y    A D
   I   N  T   E
    *G*    ARS
This is very sad.  I hope that you will soon find the man who should be in your bed.  Like, TODAY!  Good Luck
Alicia A. Renzelman

dena*mystrawberries
Junior Member
since 2000-10-15
Posts 15

10 posted 2000-12-14 12:23 PM


jeez...you guys really know how to make a gal feel pathetic..lol...it really isnt that bad...its just one of those things....i gotta tell you guys, though..when he smiles..well it's incredible....
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