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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Bathing In Moonlight (Villanelle from the Workshop) Full moon, your magic light shines down on me Your silver spell a cherished memory Illuminating beams; sweet mystery You bring my spirit utter ecstasy Delightful light of perfect harmony Full moon, your magic light shines down on me You calm my storms till I feel heavenly Your touch is like a lover's hand on me Illuminating beams; sweet mystery Seductive flirt with my reality You chain my heart; bequeathing liberty Full moon, your magic light shines down on me Alluring dreams into conspiracy Of moon lit images illusory Illuminating beams; sweet mystery A silver frail note flutters playfully Enchanting melody; night's symphony Full moon, your magic light shines down on me Illuminating beams; sweet mystery Munda [This message has been edited by Munda (edited 12-10-2000).] |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
hey Munda i haven't been to the workshop for ages! i don't know about the moon, but Nan has sure worked some magic on you, no? I know how hard these things are to do, and here, my friend, you have done some really excellent work. Two great "anchor" lines, and also you maintain the iambic pentameter flawlessly throughout the whole piece which in itself isn't easy to do. I loved the way you explore the different effects the moon has on the speaker - a very well thought out and executed villanelle Munda... well done indeed philip |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Munda; Exquisite....purely a work of poetic art! Ellie Belief is a truth held in the mind; faith is a fire in the heart. Joseph Fort Newton |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Very well done indeed, Munda. Hard to keep up that rhyme scheme and keep on finding new ways to talk about the moon. Good work! To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is absolutely beautiful, Munda! Very beautifully done! Denise |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
Very beautiful Villanelle Munda It flows very nicely . Suzanne |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Munda~ Just a lovely execution of the Villanelle. The moon would seem to be an excellent subject for this form. You've made it look easy - and I know it's not. Very nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Stunning my friend. You have done very well.  LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Philip, thank you my friend and when may we see you in the workshop again ? You're awfully missed there. Ellie, kcsgrandma, Denise, Suzanne and Marge: thank you for your wonderful words.  Lone Wolf, thank you my friend. I hope to see some of your poetry again soon. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
HOw lovely, I only just recently wrote my first villanelle, I love the form, very very much! "Always be a first rate version of your self instead of a second rate version of someone else." Marilyn Monroe |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Munda, This piece flows so freely, surreal images as light as a moonbeams enchanting the darkness, charming the the spirit! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
this piece is so easy to read..great flow..and the meter is excellent..gotta try one of these one day..thank you for sharing. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
Wow... I love the moonlight...more so then being in the sun, I think. Anyhow, this is wonderful!  |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
so tender and dazzling... the magic of starlight... beautiful poem. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Pleasent images of the moon and a nice flow Life has got to chnage, Nothing stays the same, Soon it will be time, For me to move on. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great!!!! I liked it. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Thank you my fellow poets. The Dutchie is honoured |
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