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SystemErroR
Junior Member
since 2000-12-03
Posts 13


0 posted 2000-12-03 11:28 PM


What treachry does the heart behold
when it fails to beat in time....
To the pulse of lover's wanton dreams
where doubts eclipse the mind.

To rise above your carnal fright
that burns from fires below....
Takes more than courage from the heart
or wisdom from the soul.

So be not tethered on distant wing
held loft by archaic prose....
My love grows nigh like winter's breath
betrayed by withered rose.




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pegasus111
Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa
1 posted 2000-12-03 11:40 PM


enter with a bang! great first post. you sure got my attention, SystemErroR. welcome to passions. this piece is very well done. and there is no mistaking the message.

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost


nicolette
Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 42
St. Paul, Minnesota
2 posted 2000-12-03 11:43 PM


beuatifully written.  I really enjoyed reading this.  I look forward to reading more.  Nicolette.
Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

3 posted 2000-12-04 02:33 AM


Hi SystemError

a powerfully written poem which I enjoyed very much  
Welcome to Passion family and please check your email for a special welcome  

Maree

"If my words could blanket the skies
and fill every corner and crevice of
this earth, still this won't be enough"
"Maree Russo"

Moon Dust
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK
4 posted 2000-12-04 03:58 PM


Wow, definately powerful. Welcome

Life has got to chnage,
Nothing stays the same,
Soon it will be time,
For me to move on.


kcsgrandma
Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME
5 posted 2000-12-04 05:58 PM


Welcome to Passions.  You have certainly made us sit up and take notice!  Looking forward to more from you.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

Romy
Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170
Plantation, Florida
6 posted 2000-12-04 08:07 PM


Welcome! very nice, can't wait to see what you post next!
JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
7 posted 2000-12-04 08:12 PM


Welcome SystemError. Great name btw.
Great first poem, come post again real soon now ya hear?  

Joy...to the world

Marge Tindal
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
8 posted 2000-12-05 01:46 AM


SystemError~
Welcome to Passions.
Very nicely done.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Broken_Winged_Angel
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere
9 posted 2000-12-07 04:30 AM


I saw the other two and missed this??? I must be going blind.. What a absolutely wonderful way to make an entrance into the Pub.  Welcome and boy oh boy I can't wait to see more from you!!  Always,
  Broken Winged Angel
    Nicole.

Suzanne Arlene
Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377
Ontario, Canada
10 posted 2000-12-07 06:23 AM


That is a great poem . Well written  It just blew me away. Welcome to Passions and   thanks for sharing your work.  I look forward to reading more. Suzanne
SystemErroR
Junior Member
since 2000-12-03
Posts 13

11 posted 2000-12-07 10:04 AM


thanks
Songbird
Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184
Missouri
12 posted 2000-12-07 08:00 PM


sounds professional to me.. welcome
a_little_girl
Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307
San Alejandro, HI, USA
13 posted 2000-12-08 10:41 AM


This is brilliant, SE. Welcome and keep it coming.      
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