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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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If my head were a top hat I'd lift it off and welcome you for this shell that I reside in this shell of flesh is dry and dust consumes me yes I would lift it off so that you may enter and fill me with your flow like fingers you would caress every dry crevice within me refreshing me like the first morning wash you would fall over me pasting my hair to my face my clothes to my body and form tiny rivers down road's which will become your world your future for where will your beginning end? where will it land? if my head were a top hat I'd lift it off to you you would land within me filling me my body a yard glass right to the very top yes oh yes I welcome you rain Angel of Darkness 27 November 2000 "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
I like the concept of dehydrated people refreshed and swelling to rebirth. very origional and well done.  the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Solstice Son Member
since 2000-09-19
Posts 469 |
....excellent....made me thirsty...body and soul....Kudos! Sol |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
lol..maree ...you don't fool me this isn't about rain ... neat little poem my friend with a clever twist in the closure great improvement from the first draft btw  well done MP |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, Maree! Denise |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The title brought me in so good. I loved it and the concept was so creative. Great work!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Pegasus, why thank you so much Solstice Thank you, er Kudos back at ya please explain Kudos hehe from Down Under here.Umm er Philip, it is about rain, dear umm what did you think it was about? Well, I am glad you liked it Denise, Thanks so much hon Hey Dopey Dope thanks so much, glad you enjoyed it Thanks all! Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
and if i were rain, i would surely seek you out!.. HI DEAR! Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
of COURSE it's not just about rain. the giveaway lines are: "down road's which will become your world your future for where will your beginning end?" don't try and convince me that you'd address mere rain in such philosophical and personal terms ... oh nooo, one can read a lot into this metaphor maree - whatever one chooses in fact, which is why it succeeds P |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Maree- wow...this is awesome! 'if my head were a top hat I'd lift it off to you you would land within me filling me my body a yard glass right to the very top yes oh yes I welcome you rain' i'm just loving this! ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Methinks top hats become you...and Maree? If you turn them upside down? They collect ALOT of rain...HUGS to you, with a giggle for Philip on the side.... |
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