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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
ever so gently tapping the tent roof, foretell white November morning |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
this presents a lovely image.. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
hmmm One day I will experience this  lovely image indeed! Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
sorry for being dense but its snow that is tapping on the tent roof, i presume? i like the way you put it.... "foretell white November morning" |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
INclan, A tent in November? an image of our vulnerability to the weather I guess, I like this! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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Joannak Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 121Indiana, USA |
I enjoyed this very much, INclan.... I can hear the snow falling as I read this. Good to see you posting again, I look forward with great anticipation to reading more from you. Joanna What better way to become immortal than to wake up each day and write? Ray Bradbury |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you all who responded. For Dark Angel, Kaile, and Dennis the gensis of this poem came during deer-hunting in the UP of Michigan. I was laying awake one night listening to my dad, brothers, and uncles snore when I heard a very faint tapping sound. We use a plasic tarp as a rain-fly when camping in the Fall-Winter. Not really snow but also not really sleet...I could hear the hard flakes hitting the fly. I knew there was going to be a white dawn.....hence the poem. I fell alseep with a smile on my face...... INclan |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Hope we get snow this year, lovely thoughts Life has got to chnage, Nothing stays the same, Soon it will be time, For me to move on. |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
INclan, Thanks for the explaination, not being a hunter I did not think of a tent, but being in Michigan, I know of the joys of winter(LOL) Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
White= snow snow=cold cold=bad bad=bad I don't like bad. hehehe....... anyway great haiku!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hi INclan, thanx for the explanation....like Joannak, i look forward to more haiku from you.... btw, i believe i have commented on your haiku in open#1 months before..i noticed that they do not adhere to the normal 5-7-5 syllable count....is that what you have written known as free-form haiku? *perks his ears eager to learn* |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you Maria, I too look for snow. Dennis, Hey winter is...fun (LOL). I was born and raised in Michigan. Life is always a little better when I can get back there. Ah Dopey, it is all about what you are used to. Kaile, you are indeed graceous and kind. Thank you. Concerning Haiku in English, from time to time poets in languages, other than Japanese, do stray from the traditional 5-7-5. I try to follow a traditional path however, to be true, the poem must fit the thought and not the thought the poem. INclan |
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