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MMoonchild
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0 posted 2000-10-05 04:33 AM


If Only's...Senryu

Mind's eye stores the truth.
Hidden words between the lines
Reveal "if only's".


Maureen

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Jon Mewett
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1 posted 2000-10-05 04:48 AM


Hi Moon .........Can't sleep again hey.....still it at least supplies me with great verse ......lovely one.....


Jon

PS...I find the album 'Sacred Spirit'music of the north american Indians is a good one for drifting off to....

MMoonchild
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2 posted 2000-10-05 05:36 AM


yes Jon, you caught me again, awake too early

I had a bit of a problem last Friday  night here and it left me in some pain..so I have been trying and hoping ice packs would relieve  the aching...maybe today will be the beginning of the good feelings..but I  can only hope...thanks for reading my  small contributions...I did write a  longer one in Open for a change...
Maureen

deleeme
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3 posted 2000-10-06 10:41 PM


MMoonChild,
  how real are these feelings- and how easy the regrets of past and wasted opportunities-  Your little verse speaks volumes--oh heart when will you learn?
                     David


WOW- another day of life-and here among friends!
Ain't God Grand!



BSC
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4 posted 2000-10-07 03:41 PM


Mmoonchild, It's simply incredible how so few words can say so much.  Terrific.  Bonnie
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5 posted 2000-10-08 01:17 PM


Maureen~
Very nicely done.
~*Marge*~


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Dennis L. White
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6 posted 2000-10-08 08:26 PM


Maureen,
  Missed opportunites may have regrets but bad choices also have regrets, we must seek a healthy balance. Good senryu.
Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)


MMoonchild
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7 posted 2000-10-08 08:37 PM


David...no regrets...just  some wasted years  hidden by lies...if only had been known...
thanks for responding
Maureen

kcsgrandma
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8 posted 2000-10-09 12:15 PM


I'm sorry for the wasted years and the lies, but hope you also found strength to overcome the "if only's".  Very thought-provoking work.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

Honeybee
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9 posted 2000-10-09 12:15 PM


~Maureen~

Oh Wow, very well expressed and poignant!  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams



MMoonchild
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10 posted 2000-10-10 03:46 AM


Bonnie
Marge
Dennis
Marilyn and Melissa...thank you all for  your responses...I would have liked to have responded to each but time and health is not allowing me to do so at the moment...
~~soft hugs and thanks again
Maureen

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