navwin » Archives » The Corner Pub » Innocence
The Corner Pub
Post A Reply Post New Topic Innocence Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
blackhalo
Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO

0 posted 2000-09-20 12:15 PM


You touch me
And I move away
You tell me you love me
And I don't understand
You say it'll be fun
And I think I have fun all the time

You say you don't understand
And I wonder why not
You ask me how old I am
And I tell you that I am 12
You tell me I'm pretty
And I think that's nice

You ask me to leave with you
And I tell you I can't
You touch my hair
And I look toward my house
You tell me I'm amazing
And I still don't understand

You smile
And I smile back
You look like a nice man
And I think you have a kind smile
You ask me again to come with you
And I can't make up my mind

You get insistant
And I tell you no
You raise your hand in anger
And I fall to the ground in fear
You let your hand fall
And I run as fast as I can

You are a 37 year old man
And I am a 12 year old child
You are a guilty man
And I am an innocent child
You are on the prowl again
And I am scared to death


Sorry this is so sloppy guys!
Alicia


[This message has been edited by Alicia Renzelman (edited 09-20-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Alicia R - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
1 posted 2000-09-20 08:00 PM


Alicia~
It's definitely not sloppy ...
it paints a vivid picture of a monster
loose in our society every day of the week.

Sad commentary on a sick side of society.

Seems we can tell them and tell them
and too often our youth still don't
heed the warnings.

I think the piece is powerful and frightening.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com



Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-09-20 08:44 PM


Very well written, Alicia!

Denise

Jon Mewett
Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

3 posted 2000-09-21 04:16 AM


A sad subject .....written so well......it's very disturbing but sadly true that this exists....you have covered this in a refined way Alicia.

Regards

Jon

blackhalo
Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
4 posted 2000-09-21 11:52 AM


Thank you all for your uplifting comments.  Marge, I completely agree.
Alicia

nicolette
Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 42
St. Paul, Minnesota
5 posted 2000-09-21 03:25 PM


Very good imagry in this poem.  You are very talented.  Beautifully written poem about something so tragic.  Thank you.
blackhalo
Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
6 posted 2000-09-21 04:30 PM


Thank YOU, Nicolette.
Alicia

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » The Corner Pub » Innocence

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary