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Honey Bunch
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since 2000-08-08
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South Africa

0 posted 2000-09-12 05:47 PM


MY LIFE

In the life of my soul I tripped through fields,
bright yellow daffodils, roses I’ve seen
with petals unfolding as loving desire,
my dreams set on clouds way up in the sky.

In the life of my mind I grew like the trees,
through heaven’s blue, stars beckoning me,
with roots as my memories deep in the past,
my tears fallen dew on branches of bark.  

In the life of my heart I thrashed in the wind,
storms tempest of lust, passion’s deep wish,
with soft gentle breeze as tender lips kiss
my longing trapped in cyclones’ fierce twist.

In the life of my world, dead captured as sleep,
summer’s lush fruit as potential not reaped,
with thunder and lightening the burning resolve
my days to be changing like rolling sea waves.

My life of the future, seeds planted unknown,
steps sinking, sliding, nature’s deep snow,
with warm, shining rays, God’s leading light,
my hands holding on, my grip ever tight.

HMH

© Copyright 2000 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
1 posted 2000-09-12 05:56 PM


Hi,
  This is so heartfelt and written very well. Really liked the ending. Love, Marcy

pegasus111
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa
2 posted 2000-09-12 06:48 PM


a wonderful read..great images.

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

Moon Dust
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since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK
3 posted 2000-09-12 06:56 PM


Yeah it was in a way comforting

Words flow heavily,
A carbon copy of my heart,
As well as my soul.

Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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4 posted 2000-09-12 08:27 PM


Beautifully expressed, Honey Bunch!

Denise

William P Bussey
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since 2000-02-26
Posts 188

5 posted 2000-09-12 09:56 PM


Your words tell me of a person searching for and not finding some unspoken goal, you blend your thoughts so beautiful, but you have your path marked clearly, as your last verse tells us, I enjoyed this very much, it is a poem to be read over and over in order to fully understand, (just one opinion) I loved this.
Honey Bunch
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since 2000-08-08
Posts 99
South Africa
6 posted 2000-09-13 02:20 AM


Hi, Marcy.  Thank you for your kind comments.  Wish me luck as I slip and slide towards the ending.  

Pegasus...Thanks for reading - glad you enjoyed.

Hello Maria, Thank you.  Yes, comforting if the grip doesn't loosen.  

Thank you, Denise, for reading and commenting.

William, Thank you for your insightful comments.  It's always a pleasure when someone "reads between the lines" as it were.  Mapping the path is one thing...walking it is another.  Hmm.  Is that a thought for another poem??  

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