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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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Well here it finally is, sorry about the delay Paula but I was on holidays and my muse is not being nice to me, thanks for the great line. "If I had to say goodbye today" BY the way this poem is in response to an inspiration challenge/plea I posted awhile back. THanks again to everyone who donated lines.  ========================== dedication to a loved one. I am naked wrapped only in the breath of your words. My defences down you hold me precious and delicate, all I can give is of you and when I reach to touch and dream of taste, the heavens fall to my feet, yet it is so easy for you to slip away. I long to cement this wonder, to be complete in the rapture of your physicality. You are day, the light the dawn without dusk, and if I had to say goodbye today I would wither and die in your abscence. < !signature--> "Think I'm - I'm lost among the undergrowth So much so I woke up I love you all the same" Manic street preachers You stole the sun from my heart. [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 09-11-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh Brian...WOW...I am astounded that my simple line brought on this tender beautiful poem. Thank you for using my words...you are an inspiration to us all |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i agree with paula...you definitely are an inspiration. ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hi, your first two lines caught my eyes.. i am naked wrapped only in the breath of your words isnt it amusing how our sole existence is governed by the words of our loved ones?... |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
this is very nice, Brian..I too am intrigued by the first two lines..lovely. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Wow! I was certainly caught by the first two lines, but the totality takes my breath away! This is so beautiful! I just might send the link to a loved one of my own. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I was caught by the entire piece, good work, Brian. "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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