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Dennis L. White
Senior Member

since 2000-02-17

Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.

0 posted 2000-08-31 08:32 AM

Murky opaque mist
Softly blankets predawn morn
Cloud lies on the ground

I'm lost in the fog
Not knowing my direction
Eyes open, yet blind

[This message has been edited by Dennis L. White (edited 08-31-2000).]

Alle'cram
Senior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 1816
Texas

1 posted 2000-08-31 11:19 AM

and this one is why your king....this is a fantastic write. marcy

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

2 posted 2000-08-31 01:54 PM

oh I like this one. Do you not think mist is beauiful though?

"Those who will not learn to use this instrument well cannot be saved by an expanded alphabet; they will only afflict us with expanded gibberish"
~

ellie LeJeune
Member Elite

since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

3 posted 2000-08-31 05:43 PM

Dear Dennis; I love these two lovely gems. A few more precious ones in the King's crown!
Beutiful job! You make it seem so real!Sis

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2000-09-02 02:47 AM

dennis-
as usual, these are terrific. always
love reading your poems.

-vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet.
-vlraynes

[This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 09-02-2000).]

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

5 posted 2000-09-03 01:44 PM

~Dennis~

Wow! Very well written! You always bring such a uniqueness and wisdom to your senryus/haikus. I absolutely loved the second one, especially the last line "eyes open, yet blind." You should be very proud of your talent. Seriously, have you ever considered publishing a collection of your haikus and senryus for the world to see? I'd purchase your book! I'll also be your manager too, how does the 70% fee sound? lol

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams

deleeme
Senior Member

since 1999-10-09

Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA

6 posted 2000-09-03 11:30 PM

Been there done that- You must have been there too, Dennis, because you describe it so perfectly! Love , Yo'Bro--David

WOW- another day of life-and here among friends!
Ain't God Grand!

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

7 posted 2000-09-04 04:57 AM

dennis, your haikus/senryus seem to be rather thought-provoking than funny of late...glad that you are spreading your poetic wings...now when will u write us a truly depressing senryu?

btw, i loved the last line"eyes open yet blind" lots

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