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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
The room fell silent and this they shared He stroked her hand to show he cared Her gentle face was soft and white He had sat a long …..cold night Her breath was soft and almost none The brightness in her eyes had gone The girl he’d known had flown away For her return…. he’d kneel and pray He then recalled her soft sweet voice Had whispered in his ear…. a choice ‘Keep me close don’t set me free Will you dream your dreams with me’ They had been……….. for many years Shared their love and shared their tears Laughed and run through meadows sweet Walked hand in hand along… the street He remembered when they’d sat and cried Because their Ginger tom had died And barely had two weeks just gone They’d rushed and bought another one And then there was the joy of birth They’d loved the child for all its worth Their life had been ……a big balloon They’d clung on tight and reached the moon He would not swap …..a moment gone There were no regrets and doubting…. none If he could stop the time…. just then He’d willing take each step again But now in confusion he sat and saw Her gentle smile was there no more Where was her warmth her glowing flame They’d been replaced with embers name He could not understand this night It wasn’t fair it wasn’t right That he should sit within this room A friend of sorrow wrapped in gloom His love was just a breath away From saying goodbye this last sad day He just sat and cursed …..and cried From his mouth his words just sighed And then she gave a gentle smile ‘Hold my hand a little while’ and before ‘I love you’ he could say He felt her spirit slip away His body shook in disbelief A flowing tide was strong his grief Before he stood he bowed his head And kissed her there upon the bed He could not see his future now Without her love he knew not how And looking back on her once more He wiped his tears and closed the door Jon Mewett [This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (edited 08-29-2000).] |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Ohhhh Jon...*tears* Such beauty in this finality I'm almost speechless....for today is 3 years that my dad passed away....and I held his hand to the very end...I saw him take his last breath. Please take this (((HUG)))...and know you aren't alone with this sadness....chanson~ ~"Music, when soft voices die, Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley~ |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
John, This is absolutely the most beautiful poem I've read in a long time. I am crying as I write this.. Dawn |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanx Chanson............I appreciate your kindness very much....fortunately for me this is an observational piece and not a direct experience....I wish you peace in your thoughts of your Dad...thank you so much. Jon |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanx Callie ...........thanx a lot for reading...and your kind words. Jon |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Jon, I am happy that your poem is fiction. (You penned the reality quite wonderfully.) Thank you for your kindness.  ...chanson~~"Music, when soft voices die, Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley~ |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
 *sighs* Wow, Jon...And here I thought I was all cried out for awhile..  Very, very well done..With a little piece of tomorrow, You'll have to kiss yesterday goodbye. Because today won't last forever, And the past will only make you cry. |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
Jon, A love lost...too soon. So very sorry, I grieve with you. So, very, very hard. Yet, this is one more beautiful poem that I cannot seem to get past. How do you do it? Eventually, all dreams come tru. If you wait long enough! Alicia A. Renzelman |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
This is so sad I was moved to tears "Those who will not learn to use this instrument well cannot be saved by an expanded alphabet; they will only afflict us with expanded gibberish" ~ |
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Honey Bunch Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 99South Africa |
My first visit here has me in tears! A beautifully sad poem that touched me deeply. Thank you! |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanx everybody...so kind Jon |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jon~ Your phrases are soft and tenderly rendered. Very nice piece. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanx Marge.........very kind. Jon |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
I have to admit I'm not very easily moved from my usual upbeat feeling...but this brought my voice to crack after I read it...this is truly a masterpiece you've written, if only you'd written it a few weeks earlier...this would definitely have gone in the best of the Book. Incredible poem, Jon. Little Spyro T. Dragon Watching the poets Passions' guardian dragon Moves with the rhymes' flow. Though my body be Human, my heart and soul be That of a dragon. |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
This is sad, but true. My wife and I know that someday one of us will have to be the first to go. I enjoyed your poem. Melton |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Jon - this is so beautiful. The tears flow as your words grip my heart. Another great piece that will not be forgotten. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Jon, nothing grips the heart more than the loss of a love. . . for love is all we have. . . and to lose it. . . well. . . Well done, superbly written, tenderly shared. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Melton,Child and Sven.........you have read my thoughts so well....I dread that day too........life can be so cruel..so enjoy things while you have them...thanx to you all. Jon |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
Once again, Jon, you have touched my heart with your words. I am speechless...This poem is beautiful and moving.... .....beth "And I still believe you can never have too much fiction because reality is such a bore..." - REA |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanx LL.......your responses are so kind..thanx for reading. Jon |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
A good friend once told me, "If you love someone, TELL THEM!!! You never know what may happen tomorrow." I think that you expressed that so awesomely, the power of words is AMAZING! Anyhow, just thought I'd share that with you. Alicia |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
This is a truely moving poem Jon. It is rather inspiring if rather sad poem and reminded me of the first poem that I have posted here. It made me remember a boy I knew that died when he was less than ten years old. This is the saddest yet... --A Little Girl |
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