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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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I watch him ride in cloaked in black armour atop an ebony steed- his mere presence the essence of power and strength the sunlight dances off his razor-sharp sword sending a glaring ray into my eyes... blinded to the danger I move closer- captive to the stranger's beauty approaching he draws his sword and as he passes thrusts it deep into my unshielded heart the prince of doubt has drawn me in and once again I am struck down -vlraynes "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet. -vlraynes |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
oh, this is so excellent! wonderfully written and yet, I know the feeling as you use exquisite analogy to describe this nasty feeling. ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
oh, my..I like this one a whole bunch..  the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing! This is very good! Denise |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
ellie- yes...a nasty feeling it is. thanks so much for your response. you always have such kind things to say. you make my day. pegasus111- thanks so much for reading and responding. i really appreciate all of your kind responses to my poems. denise- thanks so much for the enthusiastic response. really glad you like this.-vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet. -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 08-28-2000).] |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
WOW!! See, this is one of those truly amazing pieces you write tricks!  It's, well...mysterious and all-explaning at the same time, it's very hard to get that effect, but you got it perfect! Great job on the whole thing, and hope to see lots more.  Little Spyro T. Dragon ______________ Um...I just hope that guy doesn't slay me with that razor-sharp sword of his... Watching the poets Passions' guardian dragon Moves with the rhymes' flow. Though my body be Human, my heart and soul be That of a dragon. |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
oohh, excellent! Short, message clear and great flow. Marcy |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Good one. A beautiful way to express a horrible emotion. "Those who will not learn to use this instrument well cannot be saved by an expanded alphabet; they will only afflict us with expanded gibberish" ~ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
spyro- thank you so much for the enthusiastic response. you flatter me. so gladyou enjoyed this. ...btw...prince or not his sword could never hurt my guardian dragon... -vicky "...untill you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet. -vlraynes |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Marcy- thanks so much for the kind words. really glad you enjoyed. Maria- thanks for reading and responding. it means alot to me. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet. -vlraynes |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
the fatal attraction to an undesirable character...reminds me of the saying "you can run but you cant hide"....pretty unique way to describe this feeling |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
Wow! This one sent chills down my spine...very moving. Great piece!...........beth "And I still believe you can never have too much fiction because reality is such a bore..." - REA |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
kaile- so true...what is it about those undesirable types that make them so hard to resist... thanks so much for responding. really glad you enjoyed. Lady Lost- thanks so much for the enthusiastic response. you just made my day! so glad you like this. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet. -vlraynes |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
WOW! how did i miss this?? i love it! well, i mean..it saddens me a bit..thinking that you may be struck down by doubt...thats a bad place to be..been there..probably will be again...!! but this is a really awesome write tricks...very wonderful... saving this one in my library! hugs, dg my soul is painted like the wings of butterflies...fairytales of yesterday will grow but never die...i can fly--my friends -Queen |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
This is really good, Vicky. I always thought of doubt as creeping in, but you show that's not always true. Sometimes we even go out to meet it. It will make a good night's pondering. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
dg- WOW back!! lol thanks for the enthusiastic reply. you KNOW that means alot to me coming from you. no...struck down by doubt is NOT a good place to be, and you know i'm doing my best not to go there. REALLY glad you enjoyed this one.  love ya bunches, -tricks "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Marilyn- glad you found this one something to ponder, my friend. in my case, doubt just has a way of appearing out of nowhere and 'striking me down'...so to speak. thanks for reading, and glad you enjoyed it. hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
I have met this Prince of Doubt, know him rather well.....great insight! Best |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
just stumbled upon this one again..thought i'd tell you one more time how 'wow!' it is hugs,dg "i could hide out under there...i just made you say 'underwear'...i could leave but i'll just stay--all my stuff's here anyway..." |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Best- sorry to hear you know him so well. i hope you don't meet up with him too often these days. thanks for reading. dg- buddy...pal...so glad you stumbled in. thanks for the 'wow'. hugs to you. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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