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Sun & Moon Haiku

Moon Dust

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since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

0 posted 2000-08-19 05:58 PM

When the sun falls
And darkness envelops
The moon will reign

Lies comfort but the truth burns.

Dennis L. White
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since 2000-02-17

Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.

1 posted 2000-08-19 06:10 PM

Maria,
This has a different syllable count than the usual 5-7-5 but it is very beautiful!
Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

2 posted 2000-08-19 07:08 PM

I agree, very beautiful. I can just see the sun setting and it getting dark. I like it

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

3 posted 2000-08-19 07:23 PM

Maria, then what if it happens to be a moonless night?LOL

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

4 posted 2000-08-19 11:58 PM

gotta love that moon..even when its hiding...

dg

"Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you."
-Kahlil Gibran

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

5 posted 2000-08-20 12:59 PM

This is absolutely lovely, Maria!

Denise

INclan
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since 1999-07-20

Posts 1024
Indiana, USA

6 posted 2000-08-20 07:43 AM

Nicely written, Maria. The moon is very powerfull in haiku. You captured the duality of eastern thought very well.

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