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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
i stand at the end of our street at our special place where we used to meet now life has turned so bad your memory is so sweet if i look back i can't recall why i let you go you were my heart and soul you made sense of it all and now i near my time to die and wander here alone i want to look once more in your eyes and feel what we felt before just one more touch from your hand so long forgotten so long forbidden one last kiss where we used to stand before the final end of rhyme at the end of our street at the end of my life at closing time [This message has been edited by allan (edited 08-19-2000).] |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Oh allan, this is sheer perfection-dream land-and if there is such a lady this would be perfect in getting her attention. Wow. I loved this....so romantic, so sweet - quite the charmer here allan. great job. marcy |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
I agree.. this was very well done..A great piece the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Ditto to the above. Excellent writing here, though that's nothing new. But * sniff * !! How sad! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This was very nice to read, it was great! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
i love this allan! the idea of "closing time"...what a great way to put the nearness of death, while standing on the corner near closing time .. wonderful writing again dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great writing, Allan! Denise |
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