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vlraynes
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0 posted 2000-08-06 04:10 AM



listen-
can you hear it
a deafening silence
the atmosphere
cries out for attention
longing to be heard
listen
and answer
in silent recognition

-vlraynes


"...until you have read
the verse on his heart,
you have not truely met
the poet.

-vlraynes


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Xeonox
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1 posted 2000-08-06 04:41 AM


You keep bringing out great stuff. Short, sweet and right to the point.  

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

2 posted 2000-08-06 05:49 AM


Hi I like your poem It's short and powerful.

Thought you might like this.

Tyrants reign across this world
Nations with their flags unfurled
By politicians insults are hurled
Can’t they hear the waiting silence?

Children starving wracked and thin
Their flesh is creeping hanging skin
Their woeful cries a screeching din
Don’t you hear the waiting silence?

Asylums stretched the prisons’ full
The sullen atmosphere is dull
Will nature next the sapiens cull
Can’t you here the waiting silence

Annihilation of your self
You don’t need books upon your self
The end is moving slow with stealth
Don’t you hear the waiting silence?

The statues shout of victories pride
Appeasement with excuses hide
Justification is just a ride
Don’t they hear the waiting silence?

Realisation in chaotic fear
The truth as always been so near
In watercolour painted clear
We’re from the waiting silence


We know these truths..........keep writing them down and who knows?


Jon


vlraynes
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3 posted 2000-08-06 12:38 PM



Jon-
  Thanks for reading and responding.    
  Thanks, also, for the poem.  You were
  right - I do like it...A LOT!  
  Very powerful.  Thanks for sharing it.

  -vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet.
                   -vlraynes


[This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 08-06-2000).]

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
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ireland
4 posted 2000-08-06 04:25 PM


Vicky really enjoyed the poem. POwerful words.

"To the centre of the
city where all roads
meet, waiting for you,To the depths of the ocean where all hopes sank,
searching for you," Joy divison

vlraynes
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5 posted 2000-08-06 04:34 PM



Xeonox-
  Sorry.  I didn't realize my reply to
  you didn't post until just now.
  Thanks so much for reading and
  responding.  You're kind words
  are truely appreciated.    

  -vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet.
                   -vlraynes



[This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 08-06-2000).]

vlraynes
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6 posted 2000-08-06 04:36 PM



Brian-
  Thanks much.  Really glad you
  liked it.  

  -vicky

"...until you have read the verse
on his heart, you have not truely
met the poet.
              -vlraynes

DawnG
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7 posted 2000-08-06 10:47 PM


Very powerful piece. Liked it a lot.

                                     Dawn

MaryArlet
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since 2000-08-07
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Phoenix, Arizona, USA
8 posted 2000-08-07 01:38 AM


I loved that Vicky!! But then I love all of your poems..  Ü
MaryArlet
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since 2000-08-07
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Phoenix, Arizona, USA
9 posted 2000-08-07 01:39 AM


I loved that Vicky!! But then I love all of your poems..  Ü
jamesjiao
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10 posted 2000-08-07 03:55 AM


I love your style, Vicky!.. Your silence penetrated me like a knife.. great stuff, hope to see more of your work..

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.



vlraynes
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11 posted 2000-08-07 08:39 PM



Dawn-
   Thanks so much!!  Really glad you
   enjoyed it.  

Mary-
   Glad you liked this one.  Thanks for
   reading and responding.  
   Welcome to the pub.  

James-
   WOW!  You flatter me.  Thanks so much
   for the encouraging words.  They really
   mean a lot.  

   THANKS AGAIN!!
  
   Love you all,
          vicky  

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet.
                  -vlraynes

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
12 posted 2000-08-08 01:17 AM


Beautifully done, Vicky. This poem gives food for thought. ellie
p.s. thank you for your lovely replies to my poems..

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL

dgvarner
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Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
13 posted 2000-08-09 12:42 PM


we do have a fascination with the atmosphere dont we, you and i....   

this is a great one, tricks!  really like it..and "powerful" it is, as others have sd!
dg


"Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you."
-Kahlil Gibran


vlraynes
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14 posted 2000-10-07 05:54 PM



ok...how did i let these get by me? ...sorry.

ellie-
   thank you so much for the kind words.
   i appreciate your responses as well.  

dg-
   oh yes...that we do.    really glad
   you enjoyed this one.    thanks for
   reading.

love you both,
        -vicky





"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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