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In the Grass Haiku |
Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Slither in the grass Your long fork'd tongue catches bugs By the garden path |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
yowwy! dont like fork'd tongued creatures! but the haiku itself, is as expected, very good! dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Dennis- Contrary to my friend dg's response, I really kinda like the little guys- well some of them anyway. Love the haiku. -vicky "I have read your words, and within them I have found your heart. -vlraynes |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
Know I shoulda mowed Now it looks like a jungle Home to slitherers! Thanks for the inspiration Bro. I see your Hiaiku and raise you one! David |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Thank you David, but no thank you......... How about a tanka? My grass is growing (Fueled by the too frequent rain) By great leaps and bounds It mocks me with shear delight Me and my broken lawn mower! Dennis :^) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dennis~ Slither, snake in grass Lawn mower makes one more pass Snake in fast retreat Ewwwwww ! Not fast enough you see Another one bites the dust ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Bro; This is a clever one and I'm hooked on these things now;; a mouse skurries by in the blink of an eye gone he swallowed it whole |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
(A Tanka it is There's no grass under my feet Although there should be-- After all it's my front yard Where I grow nothing but weeds! (and tanka, tanka, tanka very much!) [This message has been edited by deleeme (edited 08-06-2000).] |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I do not know how to write haiku, but I love yours. Dawn |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Oh, wow, it's amazing.. so short yet so vivid.. oh by the way, what are the charasteristics of a haiku? I don't know how to write one either. - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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