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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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hi guys. never really tried this before; but i've been enjoying everyone else's so much, i just had to give it a shot. hope you like it.  _____________________________________ storm clouds set the stage lightning flashes cue raindance thunder claps applause -vlraynes "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet. -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 08-03-2000).] |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I like! A lot! Joy |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
I've just recently started these too. You've begun with an absolute beauty! The last line where the thunder claps applause is a stroke of genius! |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Vlraynes, EXCELLENT! You're a Natural! WRITE ON! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has past Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
you go girl!! LOVE IT! i'm with allan--that last line is awesomeness!  dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow, Vicky, It is excellent! I can't believe that it is a first attempt! Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 08-03-2000).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Joy- Thanks for reading. Glad you liked it. allan- Thanks so much for the kind words. These really are fun aren't they. Dennis- Wow! Thank you so much for your response. Your compliments and words of encouragement mean so much. Thanks for "you're a natural". Coming from you, that is the ultiimate compliment. Your haiku is AWESOME!  Thanks for reading. dg- Thanks, my friend! Your words, as well, mean a great deal to me. This was fun to write. Gladyou liked it. Denise- Thanks for the enthusiastic response. Yes, this was really a first attempt; but it was so much fun, I'm sure it won't be the last. Glad you enjoyed! THANKS AGAIN EVERYONE!! YOU'RE RESPONSES HAVE MADE MY DAY!!! love you all, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet. -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 08-03-2000).] |
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