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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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She was crowned Homecoming Queen unanimously Her beaming smile stole hearts Her gorgeous shapely body screamed for attention Her bubbly personality was infectious Her sparkling wit pleased even the solemn judges Stars have their moment and then they die The same people who crowned her were the ones who dethroned her when she started to... ...gain weight |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Kaile; Ilove the way you wrote this, but I feel really angry at this whole body image thing! It just proves how shallow the worlds thinking is. They all need to spend a week here at passions and learn the inner beauty that exists in peoples hearts. A good sentence for the spiritually impaired, don't you think? Good for you that you make us all do some thinking here! Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
Mental Picture: Homecoming Queen, nine months preggers by Billy (the homecoming king who is now overweight and owner of Bob's Plumbing)at her 10 year class reunion. Class Nerd Who got No attention: Blossomed into a Beautiful wealthy scientist who found true love with a handsome millionaire....haha. Stars fall..and Flowers Bloom! You can never have too much fiction; reality can be such a bore |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Tis sad but true how no one sees beyond the skin. The don't look at the heart inside Great way to show the world's eyes. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Challenge well met, Kaile! Denise |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I struggle with people not looking beyond the physical every day. Great work here. Dawn |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
kaile, this sounds like somethin tat happened to an ex miss world or miss universe? not sure.....anyway I enjoyed this short and sweet piece......*S* love, michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Kaile, thanks for taking in part in the challenge. A wonderful poem, yes it is true that we put so much pressure and focus on image. "A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
kaile..it IS sad how the world views us as bodies rather than people isnt it...society has its rathers, and we dont all fit..  this is a sad--but true poem... well written  dg "i speak in written word--my lips, no sound may utter..." dgvarner |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thank you all for replying....it felt nice when a poem that gave you so much trouble is still well-received in the end thank you again  |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Well done kaile ! I love the message. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
you made me smile with this one. its just a shame that something like that would happen because of imperfections. ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kaile~ Very well done, sir ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Is it me or is there just so many 'fat' poems from you? The fat swan was one...  And yes, you did just describe a fallen star, and the reality and irony of it. People are just so un-forgiving... _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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