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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I look up into the night Beholding an awesome sight The sky is filled with shining stars Like lightning bugs in little jars Now is their time to shine They have theirs like I have mine Each has its own space They are never out of place Constellations can be their dwelling All have a story worth telling Beautiful images that alight In their prime they burn bright As all of us surely know Everyone has a time to go Stars have their moment then they die Ceasing to shine in the vastness of the sky Whenever you wish upon a shooting star Your dreams will travel very far Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Hi Lone Wolf This is so lovely and child like just so wonderful. I would like to print this and send it to my niece if that is OK with you? I know she will adore it.  JON |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
That's a magnificent sky u've painted...I imagine it to be an oil-painting and I can see it right b4 my eyes......Lone Wolf this is great! *S* love, michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
What a lovely poem! That Disney song "when you wish upon a star" is in my head now! I am glad to know that someone else out there looks at the star-filled sky and dreams away..like me! You can never have too much fiction; reality can be such a bore |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~LW,...perfecto. *"Like lightning bugs in little jars"..... love that!!! This is a great response to Brian's challenge. Great,great writing you. Be well. *Peace. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
LW a beautiful poem, lovely. THanks for taking part in the challenge.< !signature--> the plot of our life sweats in the dark like a face the mystery of childbirth, of childhood itself grave visitations what is it that calls to us?" patti smith [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 07-18-2000).] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jon . . . Thank you very much. I would be most honored to have you print it and send it to your niece. Fine by me!! Michelle . . . I love the way you see it. That is awesome. Thanks!! Lady Lost . . . I am glad someone else does it too!! I dream a lot when I look up at the stars. Thank you. SF . . . I love that line too!!! Hehe. Thanks so much for reading. Glad you liked. Same to you my friend. Brian . . . You are welcome. It was a fun challenge to do. Thank you for posting it!! Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Lone Wolf, This was exquisite... ... but then when is it not? ... you really got stuck into this challenge and came out trumps....  regards, sudhir |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Hey Lone Wolf.. I really like this one.. ^_^ Hmm.. Lone Wolf.. u haven't by any chance ever been into the mojoski chat site, have u?? I think I met u there.. well, may just have been someone with your nick.. but your poetry sounds similar.. ^_^ I shall have to watch out for more of yours.. -Lynne (I may have been Jie Mei then?? ^_^) |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sudhir . . . Thank you from the bottom of my heart. Trumps?? Oooh, I like that!! Yu Lan . . . Glad you like. Sorry, I have never been there. Many Lone Wolf's out there though. I am usually in open......watch there.  Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
This was such a delightful poem, i enjoyed it very much. I think you met the challenge with finesse. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Lost Dreamer, Thank you very much. It was fun for me to write. Happy to hear you liked it. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
I like this... terrific poem Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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