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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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Under blessed twilight we were born Destined to be lovers in the shadows Of alleys away from the elder's scorn We were wild creatures dancing in eternal sorrows Drown with our passions burning and hearts torn. A brilliance raged across the still secret night Hands clutching flesh teeth sinking in sweet fruit We burned candles, embers cast across dawn's first light To bloom in stolen truth, as stars of eternal youth Aligning in our paradise our burdened love took flight. We were forbidden love under their protection To be separated at all cost, volatile desire Colliding in a vacuum exploding without direction Away from stern gaze our skin soared on fire Weeping our jewels baptised in a sea of affection. Sorrow seared as terror erupted upon frozen sky Elders descended ravens ravaging our bliss We were slain, our hearts trembling to a sigh We sealed our salvation from stone in our final kiss Stars have their moment and then they die. "Out of sorrow entire worlds have been built Out of longing great wonders have been willed They're only little tears, darling, let them spill" Nick |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
very sensual and a great use of the "challenge" verse ... nice (very) nice ... bravo ... your working is inspiring ... [This message has been edited by MA Miller (edited 07-16-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
We were forbidden love under their protection To be separated at all cost, volatile desire Colliding in a vacuum exploding without direction Away from stern gaze our skin soared on fire Weeping our jewels baptised in a sea of affection. Sorrow seared as terror erupted upon frozen sky Elders descended ravens ravaging our bliss We were slain, our hearts trembling to a sigh We sealed our salvation from stone in our final kiss Stars have their moment and then they die. ------------------- hehe..I found you LOL (paper work? what paper work)  nice try Bri...lol this was the first place I looked hehe awesome poem my friend...very nice read sensual and visually stunning... reminds me of those cherubs we know and love LOL very cool poem Bri-guy later-starstruck-gator eve There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Your writing never ceases to amaze me, Brian! This is magnificent!  Denise |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Brian, this is excellent!! I must say you met your own challenge nicely.  |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Brian, Once again your mind creates a masterpiece, and with your own challenge at that. Excellent job I love it. |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
*sighs* very nicely done |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Very romantic, brian! How I envy ur writing *S* If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Very nice Brian!!!!!!! The way you use words is wonderful!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Have to hand it to you brian... you set high standards for yourself and then meet them perfectly... that is greatness in itself... and your poetry then remains as only another wonder .... regards, sudhir |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Thanks to everyone for their very generous and wonderful comments and continued support. I am blushing from all your beautiful words, thanks. : ) "Out of sorrow entire worlds have been built Out of longing great wonders have been willed They're only little tears, darling, let them spill" Nick |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
What a wonderful tale you tell..The desires of young lovers..indulging in passionate moments..struggling with a generation of people who say that what they do is of evil nature... Beautifully written, this poem really got a hold of my heart... You can never have too much fiction; reality can be such a bore |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
*shiver* *sigh*... how i'd love to watch your dreams happen... dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
"to bloom in stolen truth,as stars of eternal youth Aligning in our paradise our burdened love took flight" "We sealed our salvation from stone in our final kiss Stars have their moment then die" ah this is beautiful....we all get that special moment in time..and we die...but somehow that one moment, that surreal memory...lasts throughout eternity...through words like these...and souls. (ah, just me rambling...trying to make sense of my thoughts) |
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