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dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

0 posted 2000-07-12 03:29 PM

a wall of words
came tumbling down--
my vulnerable heart,
open and naked,
now bruised and battered.
i came to you always in truth,
honesty was ours.
but this day
the familiar scattered--
bits of us were ripped away,
chewed and spit
     as waste...
our words
chose different seeds,
and grew to different rains.
we threw our minds
as knife blades;
swords to wound...
my soul weeps
as, tainted, our friendship
     flounders.
i long to gather it up, but
     reach it, i cannot.
blindly i build a wall
     never meant for you...
i learn to guard my wounded heart
from the battle you've chosen to rage.
my soul, i keep close,
     the tears there are endless,
as i realize it is no longer safe--
even with you...

-dgvarner
7-8-00
for abc...

"A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-07-12 08:13 PM

~DG,...Heavy stuff here. Mmm,...I am impressed. The images you have created, and the wording...super.
"bits of us were ripped away,
chewed and spit
as waste...",...wow, so full of feeling and meat behind your words.
"we threw our minds
as knife blades;",...again, wow.
~Diggin' this big time, if you haven't noticed already. Oh and at the end when the speaker expresses that they have realized that their soul is no longer safe with the other....Whoa!!! Don't know what else to say. Enjoyed. *Peace.

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

2 posted 2000-07-12 08:41 PM

thanks spitfire

i'm glad its likable! i wish i could enjoy it too--but i feel every word right now...

dg

[This message has been edited by dgvarner (edited 07-12-2000).]

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-07-12 08:53 PM

~

I'm sorry you are hurting.

~
*Peace.

ellie LeJeune
Member Elite

since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

4 posted 2000-07-12 09:45 PM

dg; painfully beautiful... even in your deep hurting you have created a hauntingly lovely
poem. This too shall pass. Ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

ell

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

5 posted 2000-07-12 10:29 PM

welcome back,dqvarner..miss your poetry lots

ditto Spitfire's comments..this poem is packed tightly with interesting imagery and refreshing phrases..like "chose different seeds and grew to different rains",
"threw our minds as knife blades" among others..this was a read much enjoyed

im sorry to know that you have lost a friendship and i wish that your pain will come to pass

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

6 posted 2000-07-12 10:35 PM

ellie and kaile..thanks for your caring words

i'm not letting go just yet on this friendship...but guarding real well my heart..

(kaile, its nice to have been missed! :

dg

midnightblues
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 1597
Singapore

7 posted 2000-07-13 06:15 AM

This is so damn superly tragic and true! sigh... alas...the course of true love never did run smooth...i guess friendship is the same...I like this *S* Vote!!

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

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