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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road 
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fast exit wisdom windows flew open five multi-colored buterflies head out crashing dwindling in heavy rainbows collide in explosions of pink wispy sirens with fleeting glimpse of you |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
Allan, Simply put: wow and welcome to the Pub. --Venus   |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
Simply put! lol I thought I was being wildly obtuse! Thanks!!  Ahh I see what you mean now. Simply Wow... Oops! Well thanks are still in order!!  [This message has been edited by allan (edited 07-02-2000).] |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
fast exit wisdom windows flew open five multi-colored buterflies head out crashing dwindling in heavy rainbows collide in explosions of pink wispy sirens with fleeting glimpse of you Allan ...You paint a metaphorical scene very well. MagnoliaBlue < !signature--> ~My Skipper Jim I love you! Your Lady June~ [This message has been edited by MagnoliaBlue (edited 07-02-2000).] |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
MagnoliaBlue Thanks. You've improved the format of this. To explain I did this trying not to form the words before I wrote them - I know that shows - but I am very interested in trying to get under the censor, get under the conscious mind. A little experiment... Allan |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This one is isn't only psychedelic, it's hallucinogenic! Really quite baroque. I love the intense, frenzied language. Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Dreamily perfect...hmmm life's wonders must credit you for such astounding portrayal .I'M SO ENVIOUS!!!!!*S* If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
allen..i like the abstract way of this.. i write more in the format of magnolia blue i suppose..but i like yours just fine great poem! dg "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
allan, nicely done...and I like that idea of trying to get "under the censor"--you should check redheart angrybraids work as well---she writes in total subconscious language, reads like dream fragments...I admire that ability in both of you. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
well allan this was an experiment gone well and i do hope you will show us more of such in the future envious here..i wish i can write like that someday...hmmm... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Allan~ Interesting thoughts and form. Enjoying your poetic growth. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Allan beautiful poem, magical "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, very magical quality to this, Allan! I like it! Denise |
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