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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
I ask you please, Help me find a title to fit these following lines. ____________________________________________________ Past the line, Of giant trees. That is where, You'll find me. Down the path, Of rock and stone. There I'll wait, For you alone. By the stream, Slow and clear. A slight cool breze, In summer air. In the grass, That grows knee deep, On the rock, 'Neath our tree. It was in, This very spot. That our love, Began it's spark. Now I wait, here today. For your answer, Which I pray. Will be most swift, Solid yes. And thus my wife, you'll be addressed. < !signature--> Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." [This message has been edited by kelieth (edited 07-01-2000).] |
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Esmeralda Ponsonby Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 138 |
Kevin, This poem is so beautiful. My suggestion for a title would be: 'Neath Our Tree, or Our Love |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
Beautiful, just plain beautiful. My suggestion is 'First Love Meeting'. -Venus |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Thank you Esmeralda and Little_Girl. Your titles all seem very clear. Now Descions I must make which great title to make for this piece for which I've post and to let you know. I plan to use the others in posts that will be soon. Descision will not be made yet I will read all request. It may take a week or to for me to decide which to use. Thank you both for your gracious posts.< !signature--> Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." [This message has been edited by kelieth (edited 07-01-2000).] |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Kevin, This is wonderful! My suggestion would be, "The Answer Tree", corny, but thats what came to mind. LOL Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has past Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Dennis I wish to thank you. For the title started a new. Poem That lies below for the title you helped it grow. ___________________________________________ The Answer Tree The answer tree, Could it be A place only I can see. Found within my, Scattered mind, Answers questions half the time. No birds here, Ever do nest, Mass confusion never relents. Thus dark tree, You help you see, To place my troubles high on thee. Maybe others will Plant a seed And soon grow their Answer Tree. Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Kevin, WOW! maybe it was'nt a corny suggestion after all! LOL I like what you've done with it! Dennis :^) |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Dennis, The words that inspire what you see inspire in me a different thing. Just close your eyes and trust your heart. The poem will come from that part. Thanks again for the title which gave the spark for me to write the tree from my heart. Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Dear Kevin; I love this so romantic poem. My suggestion would be...."neath boughs of love" It will be fun to see which title you do chose. Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. ellie LeJeune |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
What a fabulous poem.. my sugestion for this would have to be "For You Alone" (breze --> breeze.. ^_^ typo..) I like yuou Answer Tree too! man, I could do with one of them, occasionally, lol.. ^^ Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is a very good poem i enjoyed it very much. thanks for posting it and keep it up and as for a title i think the answer tree is a good idea. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
All the advice that I have seen. Is great from all of thee. I will no doubt have a choice, Of the name of this post. Thank you one and all. For the help for which I've called. All seem great names to me. I need to ask more time of thee. Appreciate all the feed back it's great. I just have a tougher decision yet to make. I let you know when I decide. Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
ow cool poem, very romantic, "pathway to my heart". is my title suggestion. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
After what I did read, From the posts you gave to me. The name that thus screams to me, Is the one 'Neath Our Tree. Thank you much one and all. For the response to my call. Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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