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Wobbly Head Bob Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299Virginia, USA |
Only words that can express The feeling Deep inside my loneliness Couldn't know of the effect When dealing So I must come recollect Time to wash away the dream And being Sold out by the idle scream I have died before my time I'm seeing But I've called your common crime Now that I have searched you down The payments For my life you begin now My two hands are not as small The day since When you won our final brawl Here I have come back as you With violence And do just what you taught me to Soon whats life will become death And silence You can't even catch you breath Walking back now no regret No lament For your shaking silouette Its my life I'm in control The years spent Now in peace I rest my soul |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
WOW...wow..i'll be back to comment more..after i shake this one off... wow... "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
....this is chilling..completely chilling.. i cant shake it.. youve done some serious writing here..very well done.. awsome.. again....."WOW"... "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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Jana Tovey Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257USA |
This depicts the destructive kinds of cycles that are becoming all too common in the lives of young people today. This stanza: "Here I have come back as you With violence And do just what you taught me to" says it all. This is a very powerful piece of work. |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Outstanding piece of writing, so full of emotion, and powerful statements. I believe it must have been very good therapy to write it. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
geez, such emotion and POWER behind these words.. so, umm.. GOOD!! ^_^ this is awesome Bob, written so well, just undescribable.. I loved reading this, loved it and hated it, if you get what I mean.. hehe.. great stuff.. Lynne oh, hehe.. didn't read septsong's reply, already said it was emotional and powerful.. aah well, u know it's true, so doesn't hurt saying it again.. *_^ [This message has been edited by Yu Lan (edited 06-01-2000).] |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Very powerful and moving Bob. What legacies we pass down from generation to generation. ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is.... Black Eagle Oglala Sioux holy man |
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