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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida 
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as i lay sleeping wet kisses fall from the sky your scattered secrets splashing upon my cool skin melting you into my heart  "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner [This message has been edited by dgvarner (edited 05-31-2000).] |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Wow...I'm awed into silence...  This is truly great work, dg! All that imagery and emotion into a tiny package...how DO you manage it?  Beautiful job!!!  And of course, hope to see many more! Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
dgvarner, Exquisite ! I must join Spyro, I am awed by this tanka! WAY TO GO! MORE, MORE!!! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate As the veiling cloud has past Playful shadows dance! D.L.White :^) |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
*great big smile* aw come on...you guys are too kind....  !!!THANK YOU so much for your encouragement!  "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Lovely, so much said in so few words, and so intimately. |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
"your scattered secrets splashing upon my cool skin" That's a really nice line to think about! Beautiful! |
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Jana Tovey Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257USA |
Very nice to see such acceptance...the scattered secrets did not deter your love...very romantic. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
im sorry for this late reply!i have no idea where i was when this was posted  anyway, im most impressed by the way you can still pack so much imagery into 31 syllables...WOW! looking 4ward to more...moi think that you will be a natural at these |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Absolutely beautiful! Denise |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
What a lovely, lovely experience! This is beautiful, dg! *S* If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
dg- wow...i love this. i can honestly say...this is the most beautiful tanka that i have ever read...i mean it. 'as i lay sleeping wet kisses fall from the sky your scattered secrets splashing upon my cool skin melting you into my heart' very beautiful love and hugs, -tricks "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
dg, I have no idea what makes a tanka, but this is really gorgeous and I love it. Very romantic, too! hugs To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
ooooo very nice Sometimes you have to let go and move on, But never let go of the memories. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
septsong, debbie,jana, kaile,dsnyder, midnight...i'm so sorry for my late thanks!! i really do appreciate all of your replies..i think i was otherwise occupied in 'voices on the web' while you guys were so kindly dropping your replies at my doorstep... thank you, thank you tricks..thank you for pulling these back up..so i'd have a chance to say thank you to all these wonderful people! lol glad you loved this one--the most beautiful one youve ever read?? wow... thanksmar..thanks friend maria..thanks too hugs, dg "i could hide out under there...i just made you say 'underwear'...i could leave but i'll just stay--all my stuff's here anyway..." |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i well remember this one please dont make me wait too long for your second tanka? |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey this was great! I loved how it flowed!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Beautifully romantic Tanka, Dg, great poetic flow, lovely. Ellie le coeur a ses raisons que la raison ne con-nait point....the heart has its reasons that reason knows nothing of.. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
kaile.. are we sure i havent written more?? (i'm not! lol) will have to chk for you..if i find one, i'll pull it up just for you thanks for your reply!dopey..glad you liked! thanks eL..thank you much for that hugs, dg "i could hide out under there...i just made you say 'underwear'...i could leave but i'll just stay--all my stuff's here anyway..." |
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