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Romy
Senior Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 1170
Plantation, Florida

0 posted 2000-05-30 09:38 AM

Frost waits patiently,
while flowers dance in the sun
celebrating life.

Flushed and excited,
the pink rose leans toward the bee,
waiting for its kiss.

childomine
Senior Member

since 2000-01-25

Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL

1 posted 2000-05-30 09:44 AM

These are beautiful Debbie. I especially like the second.

Jon Mewett
Senior Member

since 2000-03-04

Posts 1304

2 posted 2000-05-30 09:45 AM

Hi Debbie

I like the first one the best of these two.

Very well written in a difficult form.

Sometimes my poems go on for ever HELP

Jon

Dennis L. White
Senior Member

since 2000-02-17

Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.

3 posted 2000-05-30 09:48 AM

Debbie,
  I LOVE these! The second is my favorite!
.....................................
Flushed and excited,
                                            the pink rose leans toward the bee,
                                             waiting for its kiss.
.....................................
PLEASE share some more of your Haikus!

                              Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
As the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance!

D.L.White :^)

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

4 posted 2000-05-30 11:28 AM

Though I like them both, I love the second one!! Fantastic.

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

5 posted 2000-05-30 11:44 AM

ditto their comments...love the second one lots

show us more haiku...

i love haiku and long to read other people's work

Romy
Senior Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 1170
Plantation, Florida

6 posted 2000-05-30 11:55 AM

Thanks everyone for your comments! I saw Haikus in this forum and thought I would submit a couple too!

I have a couple of questions though.
First, does Haiku HAVE to be about nature? Can the subject be about other things?
And second, what is Tanka?

Debbie

Songbird
Member Elite

since 1999-12-15

Posts 2184
Missouri

7 posted 2000-05-30 01:57 PM

Beautiful miniture portraits of nature you have taken without a camera.

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

8 posted 2000-05-30 03:28 PM

debbie..these are both great--but the second one was just awsome...

my question too: what the heck is tanka!? lol

"A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner

2dalimit
Member Elite

since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

9 posted 2000-05-31 09:06 AM

Debbie,
Those were very peaceful. Thank you for the read.
Melton

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