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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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Strong wind blows and shakes~ Unyielding, vibrant leaves stay~ Whirling to its tune Hypnotic trance~ In the breeze,lively leaves dance~ High spirits enhanced [This message has been edited by kaile (edited 05-30-2000).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Kaile, Very nice  |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
kaile! you liked the haiku idea?? i see it's caught on... good job on your work! i especially like the second one: "Hypnotic trance~" "lively leaves dance~" great phrases! "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
kaile, How clever to use rhyme in your second haiku (trance,dance,enhance). The creativity here at Passions never ceases to amaze and amuse me! Nice job! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate As the veiling cloud has past Playful shadows dance! D.L.White :^) |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
dg and dennis, i have found out since then that haiku is not meant to be rhymed..hmmm... another one leaf stares at the sun tugging at its branch, yearning for the birdie's flight |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
I like these, rhymed or not. Maybe you could invent a new form - Rhymeku? To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
these are precious..great images..merry christmas.. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
A great one here! I liked it tons!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey there, these were really good. I liked how it rhymed, and "Rhymeku" is pretty funny  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
what an excellent idea...Rhymeku...rest assured i will attempt these when my muse decides to cooperate with me.... heres one: leaves on flight shining heartwarm light on my night [This message has been edited by kaile (edited 12-31-2000).] |
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