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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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the Watcher Sitting in darkest corner watching, ever watching his stubby pencil in hand. The dance swirling on as the ritual winds down damn closing, getting closer. Trembling hands lift elixir with smoke yellowed fingers insight hurriedly scribbled. Couples laughingly tease as the desperate pair off leaving the few, and the watcher. Watching eye sharp and clear his mind clouded with life recording, reporting the moment. Liquid antidote helps dilute, weaken the past watching for a distant tomorrow. Gently booted from perch watcher stumbles tword home pausing to scribble anew. Laughing under pale moonlight as irony sinks in even deeper nothing to watch now, ‘cept the watcher. ~~~~~~~~~~~ Seems i'm stuck in this format for awhile- this will likely pass. In this same vein, probably reported by the Watcher...i have a piece that is scathing and spitefull called theWhore. If y'all want to see it, just ask. bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Wobbly Head Bob Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299Virginia, USA |
I think I know what its like to be the "watcher" that was the subject of this piece. Sitting, and watching as people dance and laugh and do what they will, passed on and passed on until its time to go, alone, and watched. I liked this one, *lol* with the exception of smoking and drinking kind of reminded me of middle-school dances...*shudder*...what memories! Thank you much! |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
B, Deep with moving emotions and expressed well. Like the concept. The last verse, is the Watcher moving on toward expressions of self to examine? Great job, made me think. Nicely written. mm |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Hey Bro...I really like this format. Seems to fit the mood as of late. I remember well being the 'watcher' as well and this sure put it in a nice neat package. Your writing has matured and gotten so intense lately and I must say it suits you well. Love you...Sis Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I love this Daniel! I guess you could say all we poets are 'watchers'! I, too, love this style, stay stuck there for as long as you like! As for your other piece, as long as it contains nothing 'explicitly' Adult in nature, please feel free to post it here. Otherwise you can feel free to post it in Adult! If you aren't sure, feel free to email me a copy and I will let you know where it is best suited! Are you feeling free enough yet?......hehehehehe Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 05-15-2000).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm a watcher, so this really hit home |
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