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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
I watch him sadly as he goes, His face ashen, as white as snow Tears flow rom my eyes, As I realize that I never said goodbye The crowd moves on, and I realize with a chill That even though I live I never truely will I'm at my end as the rain falls, He was my friend And that's all That really mattered I feel like I'm falling From this bridge called life, Teetering, hanging from a thread and yet I know... ...I am already dead |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Despite the author's name...this was NOT written by a little girl. The emotion here's overwhelming! *sniff* Such a beautiful piece...sad, but beautiful.  /  Hope to see more great work!  Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions. This is a very sad, heartbreaking poem, expressing well the grief that accompanies the loss of a loved one. Please check your email for a special welcome! Denise |
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John the cat Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 357England |
Welcome to the pub. A moving pieceof writing. May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out. Irish proverb. |
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Lonely Shadow Member
since 2000-03-14
Posts 128Virginia |
This is a beautiful poem yet sorrowful... it hurts so much to lose someone you love To find love is to know true happiness... to lose love is to lose everything |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
 As I read this, I couldn't help but wonder if we've shared any of the same of life's little lessons. Who knows... Anyhow, I really enjoyed this. I look forward to seeing more of your work. Welcome to the pub. I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell. |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
I had to add another thought down here. Two of my friends were killed in a car wreck last summer. Eva and Derek. They were really close and died together. Your poem made me think of Eva. And I could see her saying those words as she watched the funeral procession. Though it may not have been the best of memories or thoughts, thankyou for bringing a long lost friend to the surface of my mind again.  I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This poem almost had me in tears. My mood has been teetering on sad all evening while my thoughts are on two Grandparents I miss very much. They are together at least in Heaven. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Welcome to the Pub. I took this from two perspectives. That of someone who is left behind and of someone who has left. Very sad. Well written. |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
Thank you! This is based upon a true experience that I've had with one of my friends (he died when he was only ten years old) and all of this emotion has been held up inside of me... so thanks again! I'll be posting again soon! |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
I had to come back and look at this again...wow...I don't think it had enough impact on me the first time...and yeah it hit me hard the second time around; right now I've got the emotional equivalent of a bloody nose...and with scales like mine, that's not an easy thing to have happen. Taking a second look at this finally put this into perspective. Thanks so much for making me remember a few things I shouldn't have forgotten. You sure made a certain kitten somewhere proud.  _____________________________ "There are many out there who have lost far too much. I leave it to you, brave one, to find within yourself that light to give to them, that their burden of loss may be lightened." --Jariidin Sataaeron 'The Covenant of the Crown' Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Wow, this is such an amazing piece of writing.. so emotional.. so beautiful.. (oh yeah, Welcome to passions!!!) wow.. ok.. I'm speechless. this poem is just so amazing.. so stunning.. so SAD! Breath taking writing, not_so_little_girl.. *_^ Lynne |
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Wobbly Head Bob Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299Virginia, USA |
I just sat here staring bleakly at a blinking cursor wondering what I could possibly say about this poem, as the feeling is for the most indescribable with words. I've lost and regretted never knowing what was there, and when its gone it doesn't come back...Very touching work, your talents deserve congratulation. |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
Truely sad. I know the feeling of losing a very good friend and never having the satisfaction of saying goodbye. He will always remain in your heart, no matter what others tell you. I'm so glad I didn't miss this one! Life defines no more than what it is you ask for. April 20, 2000 Alicia A. Renzelman |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
Wow, I'm speechless. Well written poem about leaving someone behind. Makes me wonder just how everyone will feel when I'm gone. Really passionate and provoking. Made me remember those that I have lost. Can see my soul being filled by your comforting words of wisdom. |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Well, I think this post deserves to be near the top for a little while longer...(and the author's always at the top of my mind, too)... Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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breezeinnc Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 47USA |
Welcome to the pub. A sad but well written poem. Hope to see many more. breezeinnc |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
That was the emotion that I felt when my friend died, so well, this poem was for him...how I wish he was here... |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I missed this the first time it was around, but very glad you brought it back up little girl. I've lost quite a few friends in my life and the emotions you describe, and yet the sensitivity at such a painful thing, I'm all choked up. I also kinda read into it losing a friend, not to death, but other reasons. Dawn |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
a_little_girl,this poem speaks volumes of the pain and agony the poet is feeling...i caught my breath as i read this intense poem and only hope that life goes on well with you now |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
beautiful and so sad nice work What I write and others read is your own experiance and perceptions. |
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