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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA 
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Walking home from work one day Keeping my sanity straight I came upon a little boy Who was but nearly eight I stopped with such a suddeness I could not comprehend The boy was staring right at me Making my courage bend This boy sat happily on a branch In the nearest tree to me His eyes focused upon a point, Which only he could see The hairs on my neck stood erect I shuddered with great fear For blood trickled slowly from his lip And directly behind his ear Such deep sadness flowed within My heart sank into this flow And then, as if he had his cue He quickly took on a glow My eyes could not understand The unreality taking place And with that the boy dissapeared Directly in front of my face For days this occurence stayed with me The fire lit within me did burn Yet nothing I did brought him back I could not make him return And eventually my life went on I forgot what I had seen It was like the vision itself Had really never been But after a hard days work That left me feeling such despair I took myself to a local bar And sat down in a chair I ordered the strongest coffee there Two sugars I poured right in And as I stirred, I looked up And focused upon a grin The wall I faced held pictures tight Pictures of days long past The one that held my attention now Had a shadow it did not cast The boy in the picture was nearly eight His eyes staring straight ahead The clothes were slightly out of date But now I knew that he was dead And from that golden moment on I've questioned all that never made sense For you never know when it's something real Or when it's just coincidence... "I keep breaking all the promises That I keep making to myself You'd think by now that I'd be over this Instead I'm feeling sorry for myself So why does everything seem desperate now? I should be feeling so alive But it feels like something's missing Something's wrong somehow It feels like something deep inside has died..." --Stabbing Westward |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Wow, this is so amazing.. I love this one!! ^_^ a brilliant piece of work.. can I ask.. what inspired this masterpiece? very impressed.. Lynne |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
Thank you, Yu Lan! Actually, these were events that actually occurred in my life. I always took them to be some kind of wierd alcohol induced dream, but I was sober both times they occured in two seperate states. I don't know, eventually I hope to know what really happened to the boy (I hope). This is a mystery I'll ponder for a while! ~~Jamie   |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
Jamie, Your poem was most delightful and intriging, So many things happen- that are beyond our understanding--but make life interesting. You may never know the riddle of your experience--but you do know someone want you to know about it. Take care, David< !signature--> "GOD GIVES- but man must open his hand." (German Proverb) [This message has been edited by deleeme (edited 05-06-2000).] |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Well you know I like a good story right. Well this is a good story. As I have said before good art comes sometimes from extreme experiences and this,in my opinion, is good art wikket search your memories for more. Jon |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Oh this one is good! I just wanted to know the explanation of it...it sure kept me reading! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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breezeinnc Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 47USA |
It is such experiences in life that make one one wonder at the complexities that surround us. Intriging and extremely readable. breezeinnc |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
David--very true! And, since someone 'lit the fire' I guess I'll spend my off time trying to figure it out!  Jon--well, I'm pleased you like my story. One thing is for sure, because of this story, I'll never look at events that happen in the same light again... Lizzie--I'm glad this captured your attention for awhile! Thanks for your comments!!! breezeinnc--I definately agree! Aren't you glad that there are a few poetic ppl like us in the world to tell the story?! Thanks for your commments! ~~Jamie |
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John the cat Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 357England |
I like this one lots. Good story and a nice flow to it. May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out. Irish proverb. |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Wow! What a great story, Jamie. Beautifully written. ~Gene |
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