Score(concrete poem for Yu Lan)

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Score(concrete poem for Yu Lan)

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

0 posted 2000-05-01 05:21 AM

The(speeding
S O C C ER BALL
whizs
to
GOAL!)
light

ful

ESP
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since 2000-01-25

Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....

1 posted 2000-05-01 08:51 AM

Lol....Kaile!!!

Hugs,
Lizzie

"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

2 posted 2000-07-01 09:33 PM

thnax ESP for responding

bringing this to the top again with a diamond shape poem for Yu Lan

              anticipation,
              hands clasped,
           bubbling in euphoria,
  fervent prayers,GOAL!,speechless dismay
           grief contorted faces,
              hunched souls,
               depression

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

3 posted 2000-07-02 12:06 PM

well funny little poem. glad to see that you scored the point. LOL

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13

Posts 1462
New Zealand

4 posted 2000-07-02 10:46 PM

Thanks kaile!! well done.. ^_^

Lynne

"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu

Mon Cherie

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since 2001-10-31

Posts 922
Land of Never-ending Summers

5 posted 2001-12-04 03:28 PM

That concrete poem....
I like the way you separate the word soccerball... u can picture the ball whizzing past the goalpost, and then coming to and abrupt halt coz of the netting...
and the-light-ful... delightful??

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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