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skyshine![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars ![]() |
Crystal cold white flakes Gently floating in the air On a winter day Settling on green boughs Blanketing needles and cones Nature's ornaments. Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Well, you've succeeded in painting the scene in my mind, while my eyes gaze out at sand and scrub. Almost makes me wanna sing 'I'm Dreaming of a Beige Christmas'! *grin* |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
Can I suggest an alternate last line for your first one? How about "Winter afternoon"? That would better separate the last line from the first two. - - - - - - - - - - - Freezing morning rain coated the meadow grasses Crystal afternoon s.a.g. |
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Joyce Johnson![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Very pretty. I remember those scenes, but not here, it's rain only.Joyce |
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skyshine![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I'm glad I was able to paint a picture with words in this poem. Thank you very much, Alicat, S. Arthur and Joyce! And thank you for the suggestion as well, S. Arthur. ![]() ~sky Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth~ This is imagery done to perfection~ LOVE THEM BOTH~ *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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skyshine![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Thank you so much Marge, that was really nice to hear! ![]() ~sky Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
very nice ! |
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skyshine![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Thanks wintertao! ![]() ~sky Hold on, if you feel like letting go |
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